pleasure mind

[cacian]

love can be blunt
highly strung
but then can be prompt
but it can never be
spunned
on its own
all along
it takes
stamina
gratuity
and a kind
to build it
a mind
and of its own
it would wind
two lovers to a
bind
together they would
find
forever to assigned.
a feeling is made
timed
harmony to a blind.

[Dark Muse]

Really like this, I found the first line was really grippining and draws the reader in. I really liked the idea behind this poem.

[stephofthenight]

I like the idea behind the piece. The format irritates me, 3-4 lines rhyme, then they don't there is not real pattern to the structure (stanza ect.) I found that quite distracting. That does not mean it is wrong, just my opinion as one who needs structure to everything :) I did enjoy the concept though

[cacian]

thank you both very much. :)