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Jerrybaldy
05-04-2014, 06:15 PM
It's okay.
It's not okay.
But it's okay.
He's not the one
Because their isn't a one.
But it's okay.
Yes.
This is it.
It's all there is.
Don't let the young folk know.
It's ok darling
All will be just fine.
The world ain't spinning
The stars are just dancing
Yes dancing
A moonlit waltz
We are most definitely not
On a spinning ball of rock.
You are not
Inside your skull
You are everywhere
My dear.
It's okay.
Today meant everything to me
There was a moment
When the sun shone behind you
Lighting your hair like a halo
It was perfect.
I could hear gulls crying above you
See a boy building castles
Everything was okay.
We are okay.
Your mother loved your father.
My father screwed my mother once
And I came out okay.
You have sleep in your eyes
Let me wipe it away.
Wake up.
Everything will be okay.

blank|verse
05-04-2014, 06:27 PM
And this one is similarly Larkin-in-a-bad-mood-esque.

The repetition of 'it's okay' works well as some kind of denier's mantra, as if by its repetition it will come to be, and reality can be kept at bay. Even the 'okay' things are cliches, and momentary before reality once again intervenes.

Which makes things very depressing, of course - there are some genuinely 'okay' things in life - but I don't think that's the point of this characteristically characterful poem, Jerry.

BioHestia
05-05-2014, 12:33 PM
Not bad, my only suggestion is to switch 'their' to 'there', unless I misread it. Somewhat depressing, but enjoyable all the same.

Haunted
05-06-2014, 07:24 PM
It makes me sad, especially the last 2 lines. When you had to say it's okay, it's most likely NOT okay.