If....

[colb2]

If I made you my everything,
Could I be more than just a fling?
If I gave you all my time,
Would it be such a crime?
If I said I’d make you forget your pain,
Could you see what you would gain?
If I wanted to make your dreams come true,
Would that seem so out of the blue?
If I gave you my heart,
Could you keep it from falling apart?
If I wanted to love you,
Would you know I’d see it*through and through?

Thinking of a special one at 5 am when I awoke wondering if I should be sharing this?

[cacian]

a vey nice and truthful piece colb2.
and why not love is about sharing feelings it aint love otherwise.
what say you? :D

[colb2]

Yes, I agree!

[cacian]

I think she is the lucky getting a poem dedicated to her:)
I believe in poetry you can say anything and get away with it. it does not get more romantic then that.

[colb2]

The one

Once you find the one to adore
Do not look no more
You need never to implore

The best in me
Is what you'll see
Forever to the highest degree

I welcome a bet
That you would always regret
What not taking this chance would beget

When you cant handle the dismay
I'll be the bright array
That will guide the way

Troubles are foreseen
But like an angel with dazzling sheen
You'll never be treated but as a queen

[jkim1812]

I like these very much. "Love" poems for me always seem to be the hardest for me in avoiding the cliche in talking about things like eye color or avoiding perceived vulgarity. I feel that you have overcome both of these things. I think these would be wonderful things to share with a loved one.

[colb2]

Thankyou.. Surprisingly enough, these are my first two poems, and now I don't want to stop! They were shared and appreciated. I feel a love poem should be described about through the intangibles as opposed to actual description of looks etc.

[colb2]

Ideas accumulate
Knowing owns abilities
Thoughts unable to duplicate
Afraid of possibilities

Imagining the ulterior
Horizon expanding
Welcoming the inferior
Always understanding

Never bereft
Searching for surcease
Physically deft
Forever at peace

[colb2]

Enthralled by your grace
A quest for longing embrace

Locked in my cross hair
Oblivious to despair

Think of me whisking you away
Visualizing love never to astray

Seeking the next clue
Hoping this could be true

At no time a pretender
Willing to surrender

Greedily take your love like a thieve
Picturing desire to achieve

Forced to be truthful
To love you would be beautiful

[cacian]

Ideas accumulate
Knowing owns abilities
Thoughts unable to duplicate
Afraid of possibilities

Imagining the ulterior
Horizon expanding
Welcoming the inferior
Always understanding

Never bereft
Searching for surcease
Physically deft
Forever at peace

I like this because the sentences are brief.
I like the style
the last stanza is cool :)

[cacian]

I like these very much. "Love" poems for me always seem to be the hardest for me in avoiding the cliche in talking about things like eye color or avoiding perceived vulgarity. I feel that you have overcome both of these things. I think these would be wonderful things to share with a loved one.

how do you mean by
eye colour or perceived vulgarity?

[colb2]

The last stanza is my favorite, thought it was a great ending point even though I wanted it to be longer. What are your thoughts on "what to be"?

[jkim1812]

how do you mean by
eye colour or perceived vulgarity?

"Her eyes were blue as the sky". I believe the painful cliche of that speaks for itself. Vulgarity in speaking about physical acts of love. Many of the words that we use to describe these acts (the acts not being vulgar or obscene in themselves) have such negative connotation. Certainly there have been people who have been able to write about this tastefully but unfortunately I am not so skilled.

And colb, I agree with you I think that the last stanza, particularly the last line was the best. There are many love poems that are Sonnets, you may find it a good growing and even fun experience to experiment with different forms such as this.

[colb2]

Hoping for a little luck
With a kiss I snuck
I'd keep you awestruck
In the back of my truck

Shelter you from the rain
Need not to explain
Your safety i'll maintain
While in my domain

Lost in a daze
My face all ablaze
Brought by your gaze
Your beauty never fails to amaze

Getting to know one another
Cuddling under the cover
The things to discover
About the unknown lover

Stars will shine bright
If you give me the delight
Of holding you tight
All through this night

[colb2]

Continuously revelating
Cloying scholastic
Unfathomed adventuring
Immensely enthusiastic

Befuddled uneasily
Tactically fortified
Befriending buoyantly
Surreptitiously diversified

Fulsomely ebullient
Communicating felicitous
Interminably abstinent
Devoting chivalrous

[YesNo]

I like the fact that you are rhyming these, however, some of the rhymes don't work. I don't know if that matters to you or not. For example, in post 9, although "thieve" rhymes with "achieve", thieve is not grammatically correct in the line. Rather, "thief" is the word which is what the reader will think and then sense a discord with "achieve" in the next line. Also "truthful" and "beautiful" don't rhyme at least in my dialect of English.

In general I think meter and alliteration within the line are more important than the end rhyme to getting a pleasing sound for the reader to enjoy. The most important part is the content of the poem. Poetry is communication. However, for some, none of the things I've mentioned matters.

[colb2]

Yes or no, I agree and had trouble with both of these lines. Thankyou for your feedback.

[colb2]

If women are down
Men need to be strong
If men are in doubt
Women make them belong

When trouble comes around
Men will fight
When love is abound
Women lose sight

If they form as one
Its a lovely scene
Not meant to be undone
So don't intervene

Lust's seen in the air
As if in a trance
What a sweet love affair
They must take this chance

[colb2]

Where does it hide
How do I know
Please be my guide
Surely i'd go

Over and under
Obstacles that appear
So lost in wonder
Are we made to cohere

You came on the scene
Off went a chyme
The path became keen
Seeing you in your prime

Just look in the distance
Will this thing thrive
Have no resistance
Let yourself dive

[cacian]

Enthralled by your grace
A quest for longing embrace

Locked in my cross hair
Oblivious to despair

Think of me whisking you away
Visualizing love never to astray

Seeking the next clue
Hoping this could be true

At no time a pretender
Willing to surrender

Greedily take your love like a thieve
Picturing desire to achieve

Forced to be truthful
To love you would be beautiful

I like this a lot. I like the rhymes. It is almost musical/ some great lines!! :)

[cacian]

Where does it hide
How do I know
Please be my guide
Surely i'd go

Over and under
Obstacles that appear
So lost in wonder
Are we made to cohere

You came on the scene
Off went a chime
The path became keen
Seeing you in your prime

Just look in the distance
Will this thing thrive
Have no resistance
Let yourself dive

very nice I like the way all the words connect. :)

[colb2]

very nice I like the way all the words connect. :)
Thankyou Cacian!!

[colb2]

When my time came near
The road became clear
Veer into life
Steer away from strife
Knife away all fear

[cacian]

When my time came near
The road became clear
Veer into life
Steer away from strife
Knife away all fear

and what a nice limerick profound and exact. you are truly talented.
I can't limerick line to save my life I don't understand it so I steer away haha :D

[colb2]

and what a nice limerick profound and exact. you are truly talented.
I can't limerick line to save my life I don't understand it so I steer away haha :D

Lol, Thankyou:-) I'm trying to learn as much as I can about this craft.. truly enjoying it!

[colb2]

Not a better life we could demand
Lovely creatures roaming this land
Waters abound fill the void
For trips taken to be enjoyed
So proud I get to underlie
The sky so blue that meets the eye
Between branches shines the light
Reflecting off, snow so white
As beautiful as great woven lace
Couldn't have found a better landing place

[colb2]

Don't be blind
Open your mind
Just like a crime
Love takes time
Let it bind

[colb2]

I wrote this for a contest

The few that hang
Slant like a fang
Some broke in two
Stuck in with glue
And oh' the stench
Makes me tummy wrench
They poke my cheek
MY MOUTH HAS A LEAK!

[colb2]

When words escaped thought
I became overwrought
Letters all mixed
The mind transfixed
Poetry's what I sought

[colb2]

As lust's seen in the eyes
Sensual thoughts arise
About the intimate touch
Which makes the body clutch
And hormones reach new highs

[colb2]

Closed eyes, unable to see
Mind rampant, how to decree
Heart alone, so predictably
Stay strong, anticipate wishfully
Life's long, you're no detainee

[cacian]

colb2 I really like this one.
a very fun and insightful read :)
nice to see you back.

[colb2]

colb2 I really like this one.
a very fun and insightful read :)
nice to see you back.

Thankyou :-), just been working a lot lately. You have wrote some great things lately and I have replies that i'll surely post when work slows.

[colb2]

Thee above
Holds my love
Trust in him
Bye bye grim
Path is drawn
Trouble gone
Re-risen
New vision

[colb2]

A friends husband left her after three years and i couldnt help but write

First day i met you,
Your light shined through,
From then i knew,

You carried him inside,
With so much pride,
Remember the night we all cried?

In times so dim,
We must look to him,
As he left on a whim,

A man such unrefined,
And oh so blind,
Please stay strong in mind,

As no one can deny,
Having you nearby,
Is worth letting untie

[colb2]

Trials we endure
Test if we are pure
As we search for a cure

Like blind leading blind
Matter over mind
Thoughts become undefined

Then all seems to fade
If just we prayed
Hearts unafraid
Asking for aid
Problems would be weighed
Answers displayed

True bliss handed down
Jerusalem the town
What a proper noun

For all to be blessed
Who would've geussed
His love at its best

[colb2]

When things seem gray
Have faith in pray
Grasp the extended hand
Let it lead to the holy land
Walk as his sequal
Seeing not but equal
Tender thy heart
Colored if abstract art
The word we've mined
Through dark, light has shined
everything now in view
Blessed be thee to have you

[colb2]

Jumping to conclusions
Quick to leap
Slow the confusion
Move at a creep
Cloudy thoughts arise
See through it the wise
Others it be demise
Yet law surely defies
The time is later
What does that mean
Meet your creator
Let nothing intervene

[colb2]

Lord you i praise,
The only phrase,
That makes the days,
Directing my ways,
No matter the maze,
To you i cry,
No longer shy,
When i ask why,
Head lifted high,
Hand to the sky,
Worries aside,
Burdens untied,
Love you supplied,
Felt all inside,
In you i confide!!!

[tailor STATELY]

I've just found you :) . I thought this was a poll and only peeked in on happenstance. I enjoy your minimalist style; and the purity of your expression speaks to me in spirit.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[colb2]

Thankyou Tailor, glad you made such a mistake that touched you. Stay tuned as im sure there's more to come :)

[colb2]

Word took hold, that's right
Snuck me, midst of night
So tired, yet no sleep
This love, i must keep
Dove deep, lit my light
Eyes open, lost sight
Faith strong, heart first leap
His own, grace i reap
Through me, let him speak
Defend, all the weak
Comfort, his is true
Near me, he sure drew
Sure find, all who seek
Joyously, tears leak
Everything, thankyou
Praise you, all i do!!

[NikolaiI]

Dear Colb,

Enjoy your poetry and the light of your faith quite a bit -

It only really brings one thought to mind, "Let's all shine together - then we'll see what real change may occur!" :)

And of how much value is joy. . .

I also like how thankyou is one word - that to me, sort of indicates or speaks to how it is sincerity and spontanaity expressing itself, as well as the connection between all life.

As with Tailor - look forward to more of your poetry :)

[colb2]

Hold fast from temptation
Focused on salvation
The only true strength
With eternal length
Let the Lords fire within
Continue strong against sin
Carrying his passion
In compelling fashion
Love pouring freely
Not just ideally
Speaking apparent
No visible deterrent

[cacian]

Hold fast from temptation
Focused on salvation
The only true strength
With eternal length
Let the Lords fire within
Continue strong against sin
Carrying his passion
In compelling fashion
Love pouring freely
Not just ideally
Speaking apparent
No visible deterrent

almost a prayer
i love the rhymes
it reads fluently
temptation
is ardenlty
nice to see you posting again :

[colb2]

Thankyou Cacian and Nikolail for reading.

[colb2]

Come to me
Guide my trek

In me live
Pray i did

Time stood still
Then it came

From up down
Light had shone

Lit my life
Faith grown strong

Love he gave
Sured all pain

Heart and soul
Came to you

Walk i must
Path you pave

Spirit said
Live to give

Heed this word
This i will

Not for me
All for You

Blessed I am
I Thankyou

[tailor STATELY]

Wonderful devotional. 3-sillybibbles throughout until the penultimate line (if I scanned correctly): blessed may be scanned as 3 or 4 sillybibbles ( http://www.thefreedictionary.com/blessed ). If you desire complete unambiguity perhaps bless'd as an alternative.

Your sentiment comes through in your spartan form, and as a personal poem I have no problems; but an audience might want more song and colour. Just a thought.

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[colb2]

Thankyou for reading and yes my poems are personal and they come out as the word comes to me. This is my first that does not rhyme which is a quite unorthodoxed to my norm but it is the way this one came to me and i enjoy the difference :)
P.S. Blessed used in the verb form is considered one syllable a few sites say as you made me do a little research ;)

[NikolaiI]

To me it's as good as it gets, because it's sharing the light you found.
Thank you friend!

Wrote this last night, thought I'd share it here-

Will I stay on Earth,
or will I rise to Heaven?
I know what Life is worth.
This basket is hand-woven.

I thught I'd explain..Like, if you took apart Milton or Goethe, simplified it to its most basic, it would be something like-

There's infinite light!! Have no fear.

So, that's what I try to share, because I found it too. And it's really great of you to share.
(Just thought I'd elaborate on that; anyway. :) keep on writing, brother!) it is always good to see.

[colb2]

Exquisite feathers,
Together they soar,
Hovering the world,
Migrating in accord,
Seasons change,
Chase the light,
Spring is here,
Faith be north!!

[colb2]

To love is to know
That in every being
The Lord is aglow
So guaranteeing
He runneth this show
Please if you are fleeing
His love is your bestow
And so very freeing

If only you pray
Its Him you need merely
In the word you'll obey
This must be meant dearly
Carried all on display
For all to see clearly

Giving all due praise
To He that saved thee
Serving all of your days
Twas You that heard my plea!!

[NikolaiI]

I am absolutely amazed by the parallels. . . Normally I sleep early but I was up past 2 writing poetry. . and so many parallels. .
especially
'That in every being
Lord is aglow'
and others. . . wonderful.

Also - one very, very amazing and true thing about it is - once you see clearly, you can never be deceived. . you will be able to see any truth and any deception as it is clearly. . .
it may sound odd but it is so very true!
very wonderful and thank you for posting this.
All strength and joy and peace to you my friend!

[colb2]

Thankyou Nikolail, this actually came to me that night at about two in the morning after being awaken with the word of "hiding".

[colb2]

The idea of this poem came days ago when i heard someone speaking on purely assumptions and today the words came together.

Sister and brother,
Love one another!
There be no such grudge,
Inviting a trudge,
We shall not assume,
As it will consume,
Instead let faith sing,
Strengthen our string,
Lifting our shoe,
Above we sure flew,
The sin He did prepay,
His word we shall purvey,
Knowing its time to share,
Clock in and let it flare!!

[colb2]

To open this house of love
Family is the only key
Where laughter is a guarantee
Locked in our hearts, trustworthy of


I am putting an old school key at the bottom so that it looks as if the lines sit in the key

[colb2]

In each moment thats passed
The heart will beat harder

With true love engrasped
Time itself being the guarder

Keeping close the only treasure
That makes the aches disappear

Hands the soul the only pleasure
This love here.. i'll always cohere