Please review my novel?

[Rekuo]

Hey guys, I have recently started writing a novel and I would very much appreciate any feedback you give me on it.
I have written two chapters so far, you don't have to read it all but please review anything you have read as it would be great help to me!

Genre: Fantasy/Adventure

Summary:
In a mythical world of many races, comes conflict created by the corrupted wizard as the wizard race was wiped out many years ago during the greatest war in Elder Earth. Despite his rule over many races he cannot acquire rule over all races and the anger leads him to start another great war.

The Novel:
https://www.fictionpress.com/s/3191646/1/Elder-Earth-The-Fight-for-Freedom

[chirpy]

First, your prologue is not a prologue. It is world building and you are off to a great start! If you are interested, you should look for world building lists. My favorite is ridiculously long, but I suggest one that is around five to fifteen questions.
I like the city-like set up. Go on google earth and zoom in on parts of europe. Look at the population patterns. Where the roads go and why. I think that will help you understand how your world mixes and who trades with who.

The reviewers on fiction press are mean, but correct in the constructive parts of their criticism.

I disagree on giving up. You are simply going about this in the wrong way. Think about your story as an research report on dolphins. You start out reading the wikipedia for dolphins, right? You write down the basic facts about dolphins and learn that there are 36 species of dolphins!
In your topic sentence, you could totally tell us there are 36 dolphin species. You could even tell us that only four are found in rivers. What I do not want to read is a topic sentence that tells about every single dolphin species there is.

You are a planner. Lord knows the writing world needs more planners. Or researchers. Whatever.

Using myself as an example, I have written over one hundred thousand words for my story. Over half of that word count is world building and character description. Am I going to publish a story where I describe every character in one thousand words? No. Do I want to? YES. I work really hard on making my characters human and my world realistic. Of course I want recognition for that! Only I know the recognition I would get is the kind you got.

How many stories have you read online that have two chapters and two hundred comments begging the author to write a third? These stories stopped at chapter two for a reason. These people have nothing else to write. Their world is flat, their characters are nothing but dialogue and basic gestures, and their plot is just a teaser.

In the words of Jake the Dog, "Dude, suckin' at something is the first step to being sorta good at something."