Transition

[Revolte]

It has been too long my beloved,
since I have heard your whimper
–that seductive, whispering plea–
that had called not in anger or fear
but in love, and in-love we are vast and free.

You had known me as boy,
when I was young and full of magic
but had forgot me in the sands
where my age had turned me tragic.

And though we had rhymed,
on rare occasion,
to the sounds of Lono's tears.
We had always stayed departed
through the hardships of our fears

–met in nights of drunk admission
that had always ran us dry,
and cursed us to the devils
who pressured us to die.

But now I see you coming
again, how could this be?!
I cut you from my veins
and you came back loving me.

[Jerrybaldy]

This reads really well Revolte. The rhythm the rhyme and the content all came together for me. I really enjoyed it.

[108 fountains]

Yes, I really enjoyed this. Somehow the emotions are both subtle and strong.
The last three lines of the third verse seemed weaker to me than the rest of the poem. - I'm guessing that "Lono's tears" is a reference to the rain associated with the Hawaiin god Lono. It might make the verse stronger if you used the last two lines of the verse to expamd on that reference.