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DATo
03-29-2014, 01:46 PM
CROSSROADS

by

DATo

I have worked for a university for many years, and as some of you may know, campuses tend to be hectic places during a school day. But in the very early morning the campus paths are devoid of the teeming masses which later appear and despoil the mystic serenity of early-morning light and shadow. The cacophony of midday noise has not yet swelled. Birdsong trills unadulterated, celebrating the dawn of another day with an avian paean of 'Ode To Joy', heard by only the granite block walls of ancient, wizened buildings as they sit silently in their ivy covered robes ... and me.

It had become my habit to walk the campus paths every morning in the early dawn to betake what had become for me an almost religious experience of quiet solitude wreathed in the gothic beauty that only an old campus can afford. One day I decided to embark upon my daily constitutional earlier and during my walk, in the very center of the campus where two paths crossed, I saw an older man walking in the same direction along the diagonal path to my left. It was obvious that our paths would cross. He walked a bit ahead of me and he reached the junction some little time before I did. We looked at each other, smiled, and exchanged unspoken nods of good-morning. I mildly resented the intrusion of this bipedal infestation to my otherwise paradisiacal routine which heretofore I had only shared with the occasional rabbit or squirrel. Then it occurred to me that perhaps it was I who was the interloper since I had now begun my walks earlier than before.

He was of a bulky, rugged frame and one could envision him in earlier days as a football lineman or a traffic cop. His grizzled grey hair was worn in a flat top style standing straight up and looking all the world like an ashen colored lawn in serious need of mowing. He wore faded, well-worn, light blue denim jeans and coat and I thought it strangely coincidental that I wore denims as well - mine newer and dark blue by contrast befitting, I mused, our difference in years. He had a jaunty step and it was apparent from the look on his face that he shared my love of this time of day, as well as the peace, beauty and solitude of the campus in early morning. The next day I began my walk at the exact same time as I tend to be fixed in my habits and was surprised to find the same man at precisely the same place on the path relative to mine as the day before. Once again we exchanged nods of greeting and this routine was to follow for many years. Sometimes the nod would be returned with a salute and sometimes with a wave but words were never exchanged. I assumed he was a maintenance worker for no professor I knew or ever heard of would be up at that time of day walking the university paths for no reason; also, his consistently worn denim attire suggested manual labor.

There comes a moment in the life of every writer when the pen stands motionless and the ink falls drop by drop upon the page: the writer sits, frustrated to describe the heart’s pain of a small boy whose dog has just died; when there can be found no words to describe the treachery of a dear friend; when there are no words in the lexicon to describe the feeling of holding his newborn child for the first time. The ineffable fascinates the perceptions, the senses and the philosophies of men. The ineffable is the genii muse which inspires, cajoles, tempts and ultimatly frustrates, for there exist no words to describe the deepest feelings of the heart. Perhaps this is why we never spoke. A knowing smile conveyed an unspoken understanding between us - the knowledge that we both were inspired by the same genii muse.

After awhile he became a part of my morning experience - a comrade who, it was apparent, shared my appreciation of the indefinable preciousness of these early morning sojourns. It became a sad day when I did not encounter my old traveling companion, and I wondered if he felt the same about not seeing me on days when I was either early or late. As time passed I saw less and less of him during my walks, and after awhile I saw him no more.

One day I picked up the local newspaper and the first thing that caught my eye was a picture of this very man. It seemed he had died and the article was about his life and accomplishments. So simple and routine was his life, so lacking in ostentatious public display that I had never known what this campus icon looked like.

I continue my morning walks, and at a sleepy crossroad each morning I smile and nod to an old friend - Howard Nemerov, Poet Laureate of the United States.

108 fountains
03-30-2014, 12:14 PM
This is a lovely story and well-written. As a reader, I felt like I was sharing your experience.

Jack of Hearts
03-30-2014, 04:49 PM
It doesn't suffer so much from the usual pitfalls and there is definitely something to be redeemed in there-- and you may call this personal taste-- but a lot of it needs to go.Trim, trim, trim. Some of the word choice affects itself toward a certain voice, but the 'voice' is no good. It loves framing the story in a forced, pedantic matter. It's the echo effect, vestigial from in this reader's mind some scholastic tendency in eras gone by. In short, your story is wearing a top hat and a tuxedo to the Punch and Judy Pageant. Jack of Hearts think would-be writers do this because, in their mind, it's how 'real' writers write. They're all fancy gentlemen, after all.

The above is deliciously stolen from some thread that yours truly is desperately searching to find. What a quote it was.





J

DATo
03-30-2014, 04:52 PM
This is a lovely story and well-written. As a reader, I felt like I was sharing your experience.

Many thanks 108 fountains. It is my understanding that you write short stories too. I would love to read some if you would be willing to share.

AHHHHH !!!! Nevermind, I found them ! [;- )

abnormalalien
02-07-2015, 12:40 PM
In contrast to Jack of Hearts, I really enjoy the voice of this narrative. I see nothing wrong with eloquent writing despite modern theories that everything must be succinct and threadbare. Everything here follows a perfect cadence and the story is an intriguing.

DATo
02-08-2015, 11:37 AM
In contrast to Jack of Hearts, I really enjoy the voice of this narrative. I see nothing wrong with eloquent writing despite modern theories that everything must be succinct and threadbare. Everything here follows a perfect cadence and the story is an intriguing.

Thanks for your support abnormalalien, and glad to see that you found your way to The Lit Net without mishap. This is the story Dr. Jim MIller's wife suggested I send to her old alma mater's magazine, The Prairie Schooner for publication. I don't think anything I write is suitable for publication especially to such a prestigious publication, but I was enormously flattered by her suggestion nonetheless.

The area described in the story is located just before you get to Olin Library behind The Quad. If you ever find yourself on this path imagine it at dawn and perhaps you will more readily appreciate the effect I describe in the story.

Look forward to touching bases with you when I return to work next week and also looking forward to reading some of your own contributions to The Lit Net.