A slip of tongue

[Mohammad Ahmad]

Pursue me wherever I go
To be near as my elbow
Or the web always I show
If you turn away,
I will turn so
Recount the hours I spent with you
You are the master of my true
Disdain the slips as I do
Don’t hear the gossip foe.
It is just a slip of tongue my dear.
Forgive me if I err
No lover I have elsewhere
But the suffix of my wisdom,
Is this year
Albeit you are distant, you are near
Just to your music I would hear
And your name is washed in my tear
That's I'm sinless and clear

[cacian]

very nice Mohammad.
the slip of the tongue is rather slong.. haha I mean long.
the last line is rather catching ;)

[Mohammad Ahmad]

very nice Mohammad.
the slip of the tongue is rather slong.. haha I mean long.
the last line is rather catching ;)
Hi Cacian
I always enjoy the poetry when it has deep meaning or precisely when it has hidden meaning ( pragmatic meaning) and the reader who has a bit of a touchable soul, no doubt, will find the exciting enjoyment.... Therefore, when I read the lines of your poem "the happiness" I at once remarked the verse that thrills my apatite for poetry...
So I want to say that the poem which it is lacking of the figurative of speech such as: the metaphors, similarity, pun, hyperbole, personification, imagery, embodying, imitating and so on, it will be a weak poem reflecting the weak ability of its writer....
So I need to advise myself and you to write poems including exciting meanings and not to be just embellished words...