phenomena

[cacian]

life a simple
stack
of beautiful arc

you walk under it
and it feels
black
is a white
mac
a cloud painted it
special effect

to a moment it is a nucance term
a colour changes to impress an attitude
to dress a chic pres

to a phenomenal stance
what you see is of another hence
impossible sense

opens your eyes nature has gaze
art not even compares to its ways
is a long way yet to days

[free]

I like the way you play with words just for the fun of the tune they make up together giving your poem an air of 'who cares' and the like. Just lovely, like a beautiful woman dressed up in a breezy way...............:)

[Mohammad Ahmad]

Well, you resemble life as a simple stack or a beautiful arc, but black, just then you wear a white raincoat ( mac)
This raincoat its original colour isn't white but it reflexes the sunbeam or in another term it is the shadowy picture of white clouds.
It is a good comparison or estimation between colours.
What a figure of speech is it? Is it a metaphor or similarity or what?


I like the same
but my dream
often is lame
Is it my aim
to search for fame?
I don't blame
but often I would like
to agitate my flame

[PeterL]

Nay, life is iridescent
'Though it is a shapeless blob
Nothing until you make it real.

Each day dawns unformed, ready
like a lump of clay on the wheel
center it, form it, keep it steady.

Each dawn is gray like greenware
ready for glaze, a stretched canvas
glaze the days, give them your colours.

In your kiln Fire the days
Bake them at high heat
They'll be hard as stone

With your colours and your design
The days will be yours to use
To fill with what you will.

[cacian]

QUOTE=Mohammad Ahmad;1252350]Well, you resemble life as a simple stack or a beautiful arc, but black, just then you wear a white raincoat ( mac)
This raincoat its original colour isn't white but it reflexes the sunbeam or in another term it is the shadowy picture of white clouds.
It is a good comparison or estimation between colours.
What a figure of speech is it? Is it a metaphor or similarity or what?
hi Mohammad I do not know the figure of speech used.
it does not matter.


I like the same
but my dream
often is lame
Is it my aim
to search for fame?
I don't blame
but often I would like
to agitate my flame
this is my kind of poetry I read it so fast I enjoyed every minute of it.
I prefer this to others you write ;)

[cacian]

I like the way you play with words just for the fun of the tune they make up together giving your poem an air of 'who cares' and the like. Just lovely, like a beautiful woman dressed up in a breezy way...............:)

hey free if you like this piece then I am content thank you for reading :)

[Mohammad Ahmad]

:smile5:
hi Mohammad I do not know the figure of speech used.
it does not matter.


this is my kind of poetry I read it so fast I enjoyed every minute of it.
I prefer this to others you write ;)

You have the choice to say that you enjoyed in your poetry, since there is no enjoyment, for what do we write?

Do I say the verses I share with you are better?
in less than two minutes I wrote them

It is just courtesy not more.