Huggies

[Delta40]

As I roast in a biscuit tin
of summer,
pass me a pack of
Huggies baby wipes
for the times I forget
how to shower.

They clean the grime
between the cracks,
moisten soft folds of skin
and mop up regurgitated pasts.

In my meltdown state
when I plough through
a box of Cadbury's Favorites wailing,
Jesus! It's The F ucking End,
I can wash my hands
of just about everything.

[miyako73]

I've been reading a lot of poems lately. I discovered that reading mundane and plain stuff again and again in a poem makes me feel and consider the entire poem as plain and mundane. simplicity can be beautiful, but not ordinariness. That's just my opinion...and feeling.

[Delta40]

In the last 12 months I've written very little as if I've arrived at the end of writing creatively. It seems impossible to step outside of this mode. I really don't know if I can crack it or whether I should just stop. Better to plod on and keep my options open I think but thanks for your honest opinion Miyako.

[miyako73]

sorry to hear that, delta. don't stop writing. try new things. reading your poems lately, i think they have the vivid narrative and description you can use in short fiction. Like this:

"They clean the grime between the cracks, moisten soft folds of skin and mop up regurgitated pasts."

Imagine if you do that to a character in a short story. Your poetic season will arrive like a thief in the night. Don't wait but be ready when it comes.

[Jerrybaldy]

My opinion is that you know you have written a good poem when you read it again after you have forgotten it and feel surprised that you managed to come up with it. It's difficult to go on comments on here as its a lottery as to who sees it before it falls off the front page. We are probably all just venting in the hope that somebody in this little corner of the www happens to make us think we have spent a little of our time on the big creation of our tiny minds and given it some credence.I suspect like me you just feel compelled to write at times because you live an uncreative life for the man. It's our cave wall. I couldn't hang a shelf to save my arse but I can string some words together.. It's a load of old bollocks ultimately with a tiny audience. It's of far more benefit to the writer than the reader usually. It's self help. I will shut up now. Ordinariness is subjective. Your poem is not ordinary in my opinion.

[MystyrMystyry]

Delta, you're a nut :), but also an inspiration, and a genius in equal measure. Write when, and about what, you feel like it - not because you feel there's a side being let down. Team Delta's not going anywhere :)

[ShadowsCool]

Be your own audience, write what entertains yourself. Be not be pigeonholed by dry spells or lost expectations; aim for the desire of writing to your interest.

I caught a glimpse of what you are going through. I have been through when creativity seemed cumbersome. When I let go of self critique, my burden loosens and my desire grows into inspiration.

[miyako73]

I'm here to be infected with creativity, besides storing my work virtually. This forum is like a workshop where ideas fly everywhere. It can also be a notebook to a person like me who is too lazy to grab a pen and a paper and too poor to afford microsoft word. Famous poets have been saying influences keep the creative juice going. Dochearts's edgy stories and islandclimber's postmodern poems, for example, have driven me to find my own voice and technique in my writing. Even Prince's two liners have shown me that there can be beauty in succinct simplicity. Hillwalker's criticisms too help and encourage. To come here for showing off, I think, is a wasted effort. you don't show off in an online forum. do it in a literary journal.

Sorry, guys. I should have kept my opinion to myself. Happy new year!