The Leap.

[Delta40]

In circles dullness turns
and I think I know the rest.

Our madness weaves despair
darker than a moonless night.

Yet exaltation pushes us forward,
lighter than any feather.

Flap, flap, flap.

In squares we stand then crouch
till it is time.

[virtuoso]

You have stumped me on this one, Delta. Have you turned into an illusionist? How does one go from a state of despair into a state of madness, then into a state of exaltation? I think that the last line of the first stanza is shallow and dismissive. How about this line? Each arcing corner curves inward. This syncs with your next stanza in which you profer the insane man. Also, I think in stanza three that exaltation is the wrong state of mind. I think more apt would be, In our delerium, we push outward/ Careening over the edge. Flapping our listless wings/ Anywho, I get the seminal drift of your poem. As usual, your meandering words make a poignant, impactful statement. Catch you again when your pen rises with the mounting tides!

[AuntShecky]

Uh-oh, this sounds like a succinct definition of "bi-polar." I like the image of exultation seeming like wings. "flap flap flap"--that's great. No doubt this one really gets off the ground.

[Delta40]

Thanks for your comments. I said madness weaves despair, not the other way round.

Aunty I appreciate your intuitive interpretation.

It deserves an edit.

[Hawkman]

Hi delta. I'm afraid I'm not too keen on this one. The syntax of the first line feels wrenched to me, as does that of the first line of the last verse. Dark as a moonless night is rather cliched, as is lighter than a feather. The majority of the verses are single sentences concluding with a full stop which keep stalling the flow. I accept that this may be intentional but it doesn't read well.

Having said all that, you do have something to say and a little more creativity in your imagery would lift the piece considerably. At the moment it reads a bit like notes for a poem, rather than the poem itself.

Live and be well - H

[Delta40]

Thanks hawk. I toiled under an eco 60 watt bulb. What more can I say?