dungeon ancient

[cacian]

you are my
seek
my
norhtwest
my
peak
i gaze at you
and i least
worry
about the reek
the rigours
the weak,
to melt
is honey
to sugar and feast
the flower
buds
tweet,
to be
is a dungeon lit
without the bits
the torture
the kicks
the tiredness
the mix,
pleasure
fix
to pastels
so crisp
it
winks,
it is happy
it is
keep
between
you
and I.
it never felt so
rabbi
the idea
the sigh.

[Mohammad Ahmad]

I take your pardon Cacian to share with you these verses; I find your words are sweet enough to encourage me

How are my pains?
It is difficult to see light
It is difficult to distinguish a loyal friend
Beside my horror I refused
I refused the red-handed
I refused the malice door
Dozens of streets I crossed alone
My face was sweated until my bone
Near the tavern I sigh painfully
My matter is thin as a cheek of a virgin maiden
Nothing disturbs me but the darkness
Nothing I hate but the violation of happiness
My message is how to avoid the malice
My message is as a smart pigeon across the world.
What is the matter value if someone still refusing the peace?

[cacian]

I take your pardon Cacian to share with you these verses; I find your words are sweet enough to encourage me

How are my pains?
It is difficult to see light
It is difficult to distinguish a loyal friend
Beside my horror I refused
I refused the red-handed
I refused the malice door
Dozens of streets I crossed alone
My face was sweated until my bone
Near the tavern I sigh painfully
My matter is thin as a cheek of a virgin maiden
Nothing disturbs me but the darkness
Nothing I hate but the violation of happiness
My message is how to avoid the malice
My message is as a smart pigeon across the world.
What is the matter value if someone still refusing the peace?

thank you Mohammad. I much like this one best so far. I like the shortness of the sentences. it reads better to me.
the last line is cool :)