a difficult

[cacian]

when
simple praises
difficult
it is because
to deep
and typical
it is flawed.
it sees itself
caught between
naught and bolt.
it would concern
if it did not
sault.
complex would
eventually jolt
the pressure is too
haught.

[dara.cv]

Neat poem. I had to look up half the words, but when I did the meaning, came bolting through. Not sure if you did that on purpose, but pretty cool.

[slipee]

The awkward humility of praise when it comes from another's misconception or naivety? Obliviousness to the real metaphorical intent, and intrigued by the irrelevant. Eventually it learns to embrace itself when the side effects prove to be positive, therefore standing unabashed [?]
Oh and then also realising flaw within itself (ones self) and coming back down to earth...

[That's what I got out of it, personally (it's all subjective right)]

-I like Cacian's Picasso-like cubism of words.

[cacian]

dara thank you very much and no the intention was undeliberate :)

[cacian]

The awkward humility of praise when it comes from another's misconception or naivety? Obliviousness to the real metaphorical intent, and intrigued by the irrelevant. Eventually it learns to embrace itself when the side effects prove to be positive, therefore standing unabashed [?]
Oh and then also realising flaw within itself (ones self) and coming back down to earth...

[That's what I got out of it, personally (it's all subjective right)]

-I like Cacian's Picasso-like cubism of words.

great feedback slipee. from the complex rises the duplex two of the same it's way too much. it does not make sense. one at a time anytime :)

[dara.cv]

So I was on my way to work when I read this this morning and didn't have time to really respond the way I would have liked. So I have to say it now, I really really really enjoyed this poem! How it simply, but accurately describes the effect of commentary on a poet.

So first, i have to admit that sometimes in your poetry the meter/rythme (being so close) throws me off, and also the intensive vocabulary. But with this one I think the harsh breaks seem to make the reader read a little closer. Also, the ordinarily difficult vocabulary (for me anyway) seems to match this poem because of the end statement of the haughtiness of some commentators. When I understood the meaning of the poem, i felt the emotion more than anything. Probably due to relation, I've certainly felt this this way. I love poetry that expresses a writers feelings even if in a moment.

Sometimes commentary is too little, close to meaningless (probably as my early morning reply seemed) which rouses no concern, and then sometimes it is too complex and almost electrifies the poet to death! So the poet feels either none or too much pressure.

That was my take on it. I could be waaaaay off, but even if I am, i loved it!

[cacian]

So I was on my way to work when I read this this morning and didn't have time to really respond the way I would have liked. So I have to say it now, I really really really enjoyed this poem! How it simply, but accurately describes the effect of commentary on a poet.

So first, i have to admit that sometimes in your poetry the meter/rythme (being so close) throws me off, and also the intensive vocabulary. But with this one I think the harsh breaks seem to make the reader read a little closer. Also, the ordinarily difficult vocabulary (for me anyway) seems to match this poem because of the end statement of the haughtiness of some commentators. When I understood the meaning of the poem, i felt the emotion more than anything. Probably due to relation, I've certainly felt this this way. I love poetry that expresses a writers feelings even if in a moment.

Sometimes commentary is too little, close to meaningless (probably as my early morning reply seemed) which rouses no concern, and then sometimes it is too complex and almost electrifies the poet to death! So the poet feels either none or too much pressure.

That was my take on it. I could be waaaaay off, but even if I am, i loved it!

dara I thank you for the lengthy feedback.it is true I do tend to intense with vocabulary but that is because I enjoy contextual poetry rather technical. I am not good at it or even I am not aware of it.
your account on this piece is perfect and thank you for reading :)