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Biggus
10-30-2013, 05:04 AM
THE SAVAGE NATURAL SCENE

The savage natural scene
In the winter meadow
Where the Falcon feeds
His talons red in the snow

BENEATH THE LEAFY CANOPY

Beneath the leafy canopy
Moonlight pierced the darkness
And shafts of lunar light
Like a brilliant laser show
Illuminated the forest floor

BENEATH THE FOREST CANOPY

Beneath the forest canopy
In the Emerald darkness
Of the ancient wood
It was refreshingly cool
But shadow soon gave way
To the dappled shade
Where the sun pierced
The leafy veil
Littering the floor
With Golden discs of light
And when the forest thinned
We came upon a Deer
Grazing in a forest glade

WINTER MAIDEN

Winter maiden
Draped afresh
In a pure white
Unsullied cloak
Hugging her contours
Uncorrupted
In its perfect purity
Her Pristine draperies
Like crisp white linen
Lying undisturbed
Natures maiden
In her winter coat

TIGER, TIGER, BURNING BRIGHT

Tiger, Tiger, burning bright
In the forests of the night
Poachers perform their rite
And leave a bloody sight

IN THE DEW FRESH MEADOW

In the dew fresh meadow
I watch the dawn’s first rays
Appear to evaporate the mist
In the majesty of Autumn days

STUNG BY HAIL AND RAIN

Stung by hail and rain
And colds numbing bite
And cut through like a knife
By the east-wind’s spite

THE SUN BURNS BRIGHT ABOVE THE BLUE

The sun burns bright above the blue
From above the clouds up high
Shining brightly through the rain
Painting rainbows across the sky

Nick Capozzoli
10-30-2013, 04:03 PM
I liked TIGER, TIGER, BURNING BRIGHT the best. The others were enjoyable to read, but IMHO could be improved by cutting out excessive adjectives.

Biggus
11-01-2013, 09:41 AM
Thank you