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virtuoso
10-29-2013, 11:52 AM
Death blots his intuitive channels,

yet one universal sentence remains

etched on his pale, drawn face

stenciled on his, peaked forehead;

"Organic substances are the provender

of Mother Earth"



But beneath its dark veil,

Death grants a temporal stime

of the animated shadow

that hovered in its mortal prime



A columnist by trade

dressed in the trappings of his grade.

A tweed suit of solemn gray;

A flossy, red bow tie,

and black trousers graced

with tidy cuffs



On his face dated lines,

not only mortality's sign,

but spent words pressed and signed.

In his ridged forehead, columns stitched

baring the strains of stretched skin,

alternately, the pillars of ink

stamped on shards of pulp



Hands not soiled by the earth,

nor grizzled by heavy machines;

genteel covers, with creased palms

sharing the tireless words

that flowed from sentient mind





Through narrow locks of bone and skin,

streams of ink poured over chalky sediments,

then congealed on the cutting floor;

the bottom line rising to the surface



Now posterity sinks into perpetuity

to be tapped not by contemporary scribes

who fork off, building virgin channels,

but by itinerant sailors-historians, scholars

dipping their oars into deep, murky waters,

as sponges, dredging, then soaking up spent lines

expunging the moss-covered, cankered strands

their own, glossy portfolios to expand



So lies a lifeless pantomime,

words enfolded into Legacy's twine,

indexed not to society's prime interest rate,

amortized and sealed in Time's dark vault.

As his words stagnate in dingy, archive dungeon,

his languid corpse decays in subterranean prison

Delta40
11-01-2013, 03:21 AM
I enjoyed aspects of this. The beginning and the end. It seemed to lose its oomph at S3 and I felt the powerful imagery fading into a mist until the final stanza.

virtuoso
11-01-2013, 08:56 AM
Thanks for your close reading, Delta40. The first, two stanzas are introductory, the final stanza brings conclusion, and the middle stanzas are the body. The meat is in the middle. You digested the appetizer, lapped up the dessert, but choked on the main course! Sorry that the body did not tickle your palate. I think that the description of his dress and his livelihood are key to the poem. It is a eulogy of sorts. I value your opinion, Delta40. Thanks for stopping by!

dara.cv
11-02-2013, 12:27 AM
Ah! I love it! Maybe its because I always wanted to be a journalist. I love how he is buried in the "trappings of his trade" and I loved how you describe his lifeless corpse as evidence of his lively convictions.

"Through narrow locks of bone and skin,
streams of ink poured over chalky sediments,
then congealed on the cutting floor;
the bottom line rising to the surface"

This stanza creates a vision that is so gory, but describes the printing process pretty wittingly.

The 7th stanza is one of my favorites for what it is saying and how it is written.

Only complaint would be it's somewhat difficult to read. I'm not an academic so bear with me on explaining why.The rhythm and meter gets lost, theres no structure. So instead of the visions flowing, the reading gets hinged. You really have to "dig deep" (lol) and "dissect" ( oh, im too cheesy) to gather the real expressiveness and interconnectedness of it all. Just my "food for thought"

But thank you, i really enjoyed this!!! so poetic!

virtuoso
11-02-2013, 01:02 AM
Thanks Dara for your incisive critique of my poem. I think that the structure is fairly-easy to follow. The first, two stanzas introduce the subject, his humanity and his uniqueness (profession). The third stanza details his mortal and post-mortal dress (same). The fourth stanza describes his face. The fifth stanza describes his hands. The sixth stanza describes the mental and physical exertions of his trade. The seventh stanza describes the dated uses of his words by his successors. The final stanza sums up his mortal legacy.