time flies

[cacian]

ah!!! the pages of time
if olny we could
wind
and redesign the minds,
we could swap
lows
for highs
sillouhettes
for lights,
we would break up
the fights
into moments
delight,
and flip
from wrong
to right
in a a second
of bright,
memory would
straight long
it never had it
strong,
and ease would have it
be
to meaning
of the sea
the sweetest air of free
and sky would but agree.

[EvoWarrior5]

I've read over some of your other poems and I wonder, what kinds of poems are they? Is there any specific name for it? Or is it just kind of a free poem in which you do whatever you like?

Anyways, on the poem I like the idea and the sound of it. There are a few spelling mistakes I noticed:

only
redesigns, isn't that supposed to be redesign here? since it's about 'we'.
moments

Is 'a moment of bright' something you can say? Never heard it honestly :O

Furthermore, I'm a bit confused at "if only we could wind and redesign the minds" what do you mean with wind here? As in rewind the time?
Also what do you mean with "memory would straight long it never had it strong" ?

[cacian]

Hi Evo and thank you for the comments.
I am not sure what you would call my poems/poetry. I just write freely away from punctuation and other lexical rules.
about
'redesign' you are right it is without an S. my mistake.

'in a second of bright' is an expression made up to suit the theme of the piece. the idea is taken from the imagery of a magic wand when it lights up before showing something.

"if only we could wind and redesign the minds" is another way of saying if we could go back and redesign what happened. in other words if we could wind time up. so yes you are right.

'memory would straight long it never had strong' means memory would last longer we would remember more and then it would be at its strongest.
one of the reasons why we may not have a good memory is because of the accumulation of bad experiences. so there is a shortage of memory because of it. we are forgetful and cannot remember a clear past.