Sentence: My Girlfriend's Period

[virtuoso]

A period, your sentence
a run-on, oozing from
your distended colon,
with dangling modifiers,
no words left to describe
your mood-altering pattern;
so please close the loose ends,
I'll blot my eyes, while
you cross your t's.

[Delta40]

Lmao! Now that's a great play on words. Somebody should call the meds!

[ennison]

Bloody hell. No doubt he's the cervix of her eye too. Biological textbooks and rhyming dictionary required. Isn't it time someone thought of combining both. It's just what bad poetry needs.

[Delta40]

I have difficulty transcribing other critiques myself but for the record virtuoso, it's nice to see you stepping out of your box (pardon the pun) when it comes to your writing and this is what lit-net is all about. I look forward to reading more of your posts!

[virtuoso]

Thanks, Delta40! My goal is to write more innovative, pleasing poems. I will continue to try and conform to the conventional style of the literature network readers. Thanks for commenting.

[angliholic]

Very creative and original
express tons of meanings with so few words

[virtuoso]

Thanks angliholic for your kind words. I guess less is more, or maybe I was too lazy to write a longer, deeper poem.