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cacian
06-10-2013, 04:11 AM
daily routine
it grinds
you green
diversify
take to the skies
the mountains
the seas
run with
the scenes
treck through the fields
climb up the hills
come down the spills
feel the earth move
the breeze
to it soothes
gentle
approves
the sun to it tunes
to its every mood
sum up to spaces
where nature elates
breath in the scents
the flowers intense
their colours invent
emotions to paint
the rainbow is faint

cafolini
06-10-2013, 11:18 AM
Good stuff. Good title.

cacian
06-10-2013, 12:05 PM
cafo thank you :)

virtuoso
06-11-2013, 11:19 AM
I think treck through the fields would be more grammatically correct. I think 'moves' should be move. I enjoyed your rhyming stime. A glimpse into what could form, if we viewed our environments in a surrealistic manner. I am putting on my rose-colored glasses, and will be traipsing along with you. Oh, beware, some people on this site do not like end rhyme. I happen to love it, so you are in good company.

cacian
06-11-2013, 03:03 PM
virtuoso I thank you for your comments and reading so glad you like rhyming oh and I rectified according to what you suggested it reads much better :)

YesNo
06-12-2013, 08:34 AM
I liked the lines ending in "hills" and "spills". It reminded me of climbing the dunes around Lake Michigan as a child.