Life's Remedy

[ThreeKlicksAway]

A short poem to reflect a certain lonely existential plight...


Life's Remedy

I never though that I should see,
What earth looks like above the trees.
But here I am up in the sky,
No gravity to be hindered by.


No rules or roads I used each day,
Just stars and hills to to guide my way.
Only sunsets to explore,
The life once led is now no more.


But one problem I can see,
The setback with no remedy.
No matter how real it may seem,
my flight's still trapped inside a dream.

[Charles Darnay]

Sometimes if you are writing a poem amidst reflection in a certain emotional stat (ie: lonely existential plight) it can help to not constrain yourself with a rhyme scheme. It takes away from your ideas when you have to force lines into a rhyme: you begin to play with syntax and it comes out awkward. Let the ideas flow, delve into the images.....the rest can follow.

[cafolini]

So, life's remedy is no remedy.
Apart from that, I agree with Charles in what he pointed out.

[ThreeKlicksAway]

Ah yes, I sometimes write like that as well. I just felt one day that I should instead use a simple rhyme scheme. I am not sure why, but I thought that for such a quickly written poem it turned out alright.
I have dreams about this very often; flying away to freedom.