Going Forward, Looking Back

[Ceile]

Years behind in my mind
Looking for a different sense of time
Searching for another place
Pining for my suspended state of grace

Miserable with this race inside
Chasing an altered stride
Something slower
For us to grow older
In time

Distraught with the lack of meaning
For the ins and outs of our being
Hunting for a resurgence of the past
Those who made their voices last

Will I ever find
A way to bind
This different sense of time?

[Charles Darnay]

If you are going to work based on a rhyme scheme, stick to it. Your sometimes-rhyme-sometimes-not creates a very jerky poem. However, you do have a couple of forced rhymes here which don't work: most notably in S3.

The ABCC structure you set up in S1 can work for something like this.