Lifelines

[Ceile]

How taut, really
Is the thread between two souls
Which can be released
With the slightest movement
Which must be unraveled
All mine heart strings
Are intricately woven
The other end loosely held
Easily let go, without a thought
Leaving a constricted mess
Of loose ends

I appeal to Emerson
To do me a favor
Light a path in the direction
Of where the individualists meet
Those who show a commonplace face
But whose hearts play the tune
Of that familiar string
The one of iron, not thread
It matters not who lets go
We are forever entwined

[Haunted]

A bit contrived. Leaving a constricted mess / Of loose ends is good. Didn't get the Emerson thing. It's not clicking yet. Do move on and keep writing. Someday it will all come together.

[Ceile]

Thanks for your feedback. The Emerson part was in reference to a quote in his Self Reliance "Trust thyself: every heart vibrates to that iron string"

[Haunted]

The danger with quoting others inside your own work is, it demands too much of the reader to connect the dots. I studied a lot but remember nothin'. And even as you explained it, I still have to make the connection and that's a lot of work and most people dont' have the patience. My point is, it's a nice intellectual exercise, but move on to something less abstract and less reliant on prior knowledge. I think the imagery is too convoluted for the poem to be fully appreciated. This piece can also be pared down, I think there's too much going back and forth, making it more complicated and confusing than it needs to be.