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cacian
04-19-2013, 04:16 AM
a chauvinist guises
feelings for ceilings
leaving no room for meanings
tricky gets by
not always why just my
no witness to sly

a dancer merges
platforms with songs
to level with love
something weakness
does not front
secular may long
sound is blind

a patriot laps
up leads from roles
no knowing what to score
he throws himself to gore
it's grown up and guard
heavy stomps apply

a semantist samples
words for wrongs
he slips advice
to prob
honourific from trumps
irrelevance grumps
obedience to rule
simple is mulled

cafolini
04-19-2013, 12:10 PM
Cacianation schisms all over nature, as if what doesn't please Cacian cannot be "au naturel." Yet, it always is. Again and again against what's natural. Impertinent.

Lokasenna
04-19-2013, 05:29 PM
a chauvinist guises
feelings for ceilings

I burst out laughing at these two lines. Funny, funny stuff. Do ceilings really inspire feelings for chauvinists? (I feel like I've wandered into a Burt Bacharach song from hell).

Everytime you 'write' a 'poem' it really is just words flung down randomly. I can't even call it creative chaos, because that usually has more sense behind it. Your last line, somehow, sums up your entire artistic philosophy (a term I use here in the broadest possible sense): 'simple is mulled', indeed.

cacian
04-20-2013, 05:53 AM
Cacianation schisms all over nature, as if what doesn't please Cacian cannot be "au naturel." Yet, it always is. Again and again against what's natural. Impertinent.

Hehe pertinence is cautioned but well worth it. ;)

cacian
04-20-2013, 05:54 AM
I burst out laughing at these two lines. Funny, funny stuff. Do ceilings really inspire feelings for chauvinists? (I feel like I've wandered into a Burt Bacharach song from hell).

Everytime you 'write' a 'poem' it really is just words flung down randomly. I can't even call it creative chaos, because that usually has more sense behind it. Your last line, somehow, sums up your entire artistic philosophy (a term I use here in the broadest possible sense): 'simple is mulled', indeed.

Lokasenna I appreciate your comments and thank you for reading. :)