once upon a rime

[cacian]

it came and went
the moon the stars
the sky is image to a past

it flew it grew
the morning view
the trees feel closer to the true

it moved and slew
the sunhine blue
to bow the sun is purest hue

it dreamed and faint
the days of saint
the evening is a show of dates

it weighed and laid
the sound of hade
the echos of the said is wade

it turned and churned
the paper milled
the rivers tone up to the move of dace

it filled and rilled
the passage gild
the earth is rich and to the stilt

it came and went
the time the wave
the world is all eyes to abseils

[YesNo]

I liked the meter in this. I would reformat it as two lines of iambic tetrameter per stanza, but it doesn't matter where the line breaks are since one can hear the pattern which is what counts.

[cacian]

YesNo thank you for reading :)
I am not however sure what you mean by
''two lines of iambic tetrameter per stanza''
I am not familiar with iambics. Are you able to show in numbers?