Prosaic verse

[osho]

Artiness and artlessness
Hung between spurious showiness and ancient simplicity I am still rocking and roaring. I do not give up on repugnance and repudiation since the world is always moving and evolving. Death may lay its cold hand on me or leave to another time.
I am a drifter. I do not occupy others’ galaxy of thoughts. The world is too big for all of us and men through a thousand temporal epochs keep on settling exploring new pathways upping Moon and Mars.
The world is not a place to stagnate and shrink into our pettiness. Everyone is a potentate to expand her empire
I am often unwelcome if unwrapped in your familiar tones. With a dagger men reworked the conduit of history. Epochal convulsions, geological cataclysms have sent kings and bankrupts to rock-bottoms. All we are drifters. Floating on the wavelength of spatial –time.

[cafolini]

You make the knowledgeable laugh his arse off and the ignorant stick to your marmelade like a mosquito.

[hillwalker]

I'm sorry, but this is impenetrable. It's guaranteed to give anyone who tries to make sense of it a headache.

Would it not be better to write something that the reader can engage with - take the effort to share your thoughts in a concise and coherent way - than try to dazzle us with profound verbiage and achieve nothing?

H

[osho]

I'm sorry, but this is impenetrable. It's guaranteed to give anyone who tries to make sense of it a headache.

Would it not be better to write something that the reader can engage with - take the effort to share your thoughts in a concise and coherent way - than try to dazzle us with profound verbiage and achieve nothing?

H


This is an experiment with style. I am poor at it and I am checking how the reader will react. Thank you for reading h and of course your comments often guide me through my darker lane and of course I have miles to go, and the achievement is far off and is not still visible. I will keep on honing my style unremittingly like the art of archery. To be an archer one has to be totally present in the work and toil day in day out. Mine is not an English background and though I love writing in English additionally since I am a prolific writer in my vernacular I know I have to work hard for another couple of years or even a decade to arrive at the standard the reader on this forum can approve of .

[hillwalker]

It's not a matter of gaining approval on here.

Your latest piece suggests you are trying too hard to impress. Keeping things simple is often a more effective way of sharing your thoughts with the readers. This applies to all writers - experienced and proficient in English or otherwise.

Keep writing.

H

[osho]

It's not a matter of gaining approval on here.

Your latest piece suggests you are trying too hard to impress. Keeping things simple is often a more effective way of sharing your thoughts with the readers. This applies to all writers - experienced and proficient in English or otherwise.

Keep writing.



H
I agree and of course I have tried to impress. On the other hand the fact is to experiment with a range of styles too. I want to create varied styles. Simplicity and plainness cannot be enough when it comes to writing for readership. I will have to impress or else I can reserve my space. I enjoy comments since it is helping me to check with my style.

[cacian]

osho what do you mean by prosaic verse?
Isn't this just a paragraph a short article?

[osho]

This is something I want to experiment the way you are doing something different. There is no demarcating line between prose and poetry. Both can be blended for some effects.

[hillwalker]

Simplicity and plainness cannot be enough when it comes to writing for readership.

I have to disagree slightly. The writer's chief aim is to communicate with the reader as effectively as possible. Clarity and conciseness must come first. By all means experiment with style like you are doing here, but there are better ways of using the richness of the language than burying the 'message' in obscurity. Never lose sight of the fact that you should write to 'express' not 'impress'.

H

[osho]

I have to disagree slightly. The writer's chief aim is to communicate with the reader as effectively as possible. Clarity and conciseness must come first. By all means experiment with style like you are doing here, but there are better ways of using the richness of the language than burying the 'message' in obscurity. Never lose sight of the fact that you should write to 'express' not 'impress'.

H

You are right h. In fact I meant to express but there happened a slipup inadvertently. I am of course at an evolutionary phase by the grace of some of the veterans. I am learning things and at the same time I am enjoying immensely in what I am learning the way a baby enjoys while learning to walk. I am indeed at an advantage when someone like you point it out to me. I am not impressing you or anybody else now. I am expressing myself boldly and of course with immense clarity.

[cacian]

You make the knowledgeable laugh his arse off and the ignorant stick to your marmelade like a mosquito.

could not that be the other way round?
I am sure I heard said the other way round.

[cacian]

This is something I want to experiment the way you are doing something different. There is no demarcating line between prose and poetry. Both can be blended for some effects.

Hi osho about this quote here:


Everyone is a potentate to expand her empire
I am often unwelcome if unwrapped in your familiar tones.
Who are you calling HER? and why the use of YOUR?

[osho]

cacain, this is due respect to femininity and the "your" is to reciprocate the feelings springing up inside my heart.