oasis realm

[cacian]

in the willow
the wind
the cello
the ring
and the dillo
the sill

in the further
the near
the near
the here
and the here
the now

follow the will
the way
to the mill the dale
and it's
oasis
the hill

to errand the tild
the realm the while
to isle the earl
and to the true the thrill

[osho]

Free flows of feelings like floods that carry anything it comes upon. And of course a blow to our purist schools of thoughts who are too much rule bound and let them cash in on their ancient theories of criticisms and let cacain on the other hand dwell on her easy, spontaneous natural wave of thought. This comes as the first few words little ones spew and the speaker does his or her dharma and karma and let our critics comment on them since their karma is to search through the poem to arrive at what is not there rather than to revel in is there galore. I personally find her poems full of music, cadence. I think she is through her poems puts her mind on the sonority.

Of course to a conservative critic she maybe nowhere given her untrammeled style. There are readers of different opinions and savors. It is not for the critics most poets write and it is for the great readership that will matter at the end of the day.

Let poets carve out their own path and let no critics come in their ways to create barriers with their critical junks. Nature is not in too much order and art should not interrupt the forceful flood of thoughts.

[cacian]

osho it is kind of you to comment. I agree that poetry is about share and tare and what is in between is glare. Those who like it flair and those who do not wear.
I have gone through the piece and rearranged the last stanza for a better flow.
I was going to ask how often do you go back to a piece and alter it?
I never settle on one and so I do go back for mores :)

[osho]

osho it is kind of you to comment. I agree that poetry is about share and tare and what is in between is glare. Those who like it flair and those who do not wear.
I have gone through the piece and rearranged the last stanza for a better flow.
I was going to ask how often do you go back to a piece and alter it?
I never settle on one and so I do go back for mores :)

cacain, you are amazing and I find in your talk the rhymes that come with arduous works and you do it at ease. I do not know of what age you are but this kind of spontaneity is found in the early unaffected stage when one cares little about the alfa and omega of poetic theories. Your imagination has a great scope and it can take indeed higher peripheries than the most who choose to sink into the few critics recommended formulas whereas you go defying the heavens like an eagle who takes flight in the high sky in your imagination unfettered by anything deterred by any forces against the finity of time and space towards the infinity of your own inner space.

[osho]

osho it is kind of you to comment. I agree that poetry is about share and tare and what is in between is glare. Those who like it flair and those who do not wear.
I have gone through the piece and rearranged the last stanza for a better flow.
I was going to ask how often do you go back to a piece and alter it?
I never settle on one and so I do go back for mores :)

Oh, I forgot to answer your question. In fact I am not editing my write-ups. I have got some suggestions here and of course I am now giving it great significance, for English is not my cup of tea and of course I cannot do better without taking creative suggestions to better my style and of course the grammar that I loathe more than anything else.

[cacian]

I cannot believe English is not your first language. You type and speak better English then I do anytime.
I am more controlled in Poetry if I go over many times. The way to learn any language is to explore all of its avenues. Poetry is one I practice because it not a conversation but more of a rethoric and so it is easy for me to just start anything. It is not directed it is free flow.
There is no arrangement to how I should answer and so the freedom to just say rather then reply is interesting to me. Haha.
For someone whose English is not their cup of tea you are doing amasingly well and much better then me I can assure you . :)

[Adolescent09]

cacian, I like your poetry in a very bizarre way. Almost like a guilty pleasure. You just write whatever you want and you don't seem to care whatsoever what anyone thinks. It seems so carefree and innocent. I'm not sure if you will take that as a compliment, but I do mean it sincerely :)

[Adolescent09]

this kind of spontaneity is found in the early unaffected stage when one cares little about the alfa and omega of poetic theories.

This is EXACTLY what I was trying to say!

Cacian, please don't change for anyone. Promise? :)

[cacian]

Adolescent I thank you very much. Very kind of you to think so haha:)

[osho]

Adolescent I thank you very much. Very kind of you to think so haha:)

You will leave footprints cacain. Your natural course will be a new track.