Everything mirrors you

[osho]

When I look at the moon
I see an image resembling you
A floating cloud in the blue sky
Remind me of your countenance
Deep forests look a lot like your eyes
Wherein I could be lost for ages
But you are as cruel as the deep-sea
That can drown my character
You often cool my soul with your mild blowing windy avatar
And ruin my entire being rising like a roaring tempest
Your attraction pulls me in your sticky lotus
Feeding me on your corpulent flesh
Only to detain me in the end in your inner darker self
Something sticky in your corporal presence entices me
Suck on you until I get stuck up
I know you are my closest rival
For you stand between my two extremes
Both hate and love at the same time.
We came together to generate life
To fill the vacancy of existence
Togetherness could not expand
For you are not me and I am not you
Everything around mirrors you
Through a cool breeze and a tempestuous breathe
For I know you are capable of fulfilling and sucking
Between your two extremities I am lost

[Charles Darnay]

There are some good images here, and the poem has a bit of that "my mistress' eyes" feel going for it - basically breaking someone into a series of metaphors. The one thing that really distracted me is that your language seems inconsistent - switching abruptly between the high rhetorical and the casual: lines 14-17 (or thereabouts) is a good example. Also, breaking the poem up and adding punctuation might help: an elongated sentence does nothing for your poem.

[Hawkman]

I agree with everything CD says, but I would also recommend that you pay attention to grammar - Verb Subject agreement as in:

"A floating cloud in the blue sky
Reminds me of your countenance"

and pay attention to spelling:

"Through a cool breeze and a tempestuous breath" and you might consider dropping the definite articles in this line.

"And ruin my entire being / rising like a roaring tempest
Your attraction pulls me in your sticky lotus
Feeding me on your corpulent flesh
Only to detain me in the end in your inner darker self
Something sticky in your corporal presence entices me
Suck on you until I get stuck up"

Punctuation is definitely an issue with the first line in this section. You need a full stop after being, otherwise the second part reads as a continuation of the first half, which makes no sense in context. What comes after this is being laid on with a trowel. The repulsive imagery becomes repetitive and tiresome. Also, "stuck up" is an adjectival noun phrase in English, meaning haughty or pompous with a monumental conceit of one's own worth. Hardly appropriate in context. The last line is also missing a necessary preposition. Consequently the whole thing is getting bogged down.

The last three lines of the poem also become repetitive, and saying you know someone is capable of sucking is a bit weird in context. Again, punctuation is an issue. "Extremities" represents appendages, like fingers or toes or the farthest physical boundary. I think you might mean extremes.

Notwithstanding, there is some good writing in here in a sound romantic vein.

Live and be well - H