Wordiness

[osho]

I try to be something
Relating with you and the rest
Making my world wider aurally

I do not crave diminution

The world is an empty stage
You danced with me
And the rest joined in
Filling the vacuity
And the staged rippled and rippled

The audience played a part in it
And lionized my image

My existence took shape and color
I got love letters

I dreamed of luxuriating in Dubai
You and the rest who wanted me were there
We had momentous evenings

Poets and writers wowed me and my comrades
From the little womb of existence
I winded my way through ranging conduits

To finally realize that all else was a dream

Everyone left the stage

Sheer wordiness wrapped me up

[cacian]

I like these lines very much:

The audience played a part in it
And lionized my image

My existence took shape and color
I got love letters[/I]

I am intrigued by lionzed. What does it mean? I see the word Lion there.

Great read thank you osho :)

[WolfLarsen]

Not bad.

[osho]

I like these lines very much:

The audience played a part in it
And lionized my image

My existence took shape and color
I got love letters[/I]

I am intrigued by lionzed. What does it mean? I see the word Lion there.

Great read thank you osho :)

Lionize means glorify, idolize somebody. It is interesting that you like my lines. And I am also happy that you read it carefully and put forth your comment.

[osho]

Not bad.


It is really gratifying and heartening you read my poem. I am not so good at writing particularly on the craft and the fact that you did not find it bad simply gave me a lot of confidence in writing more and more in the days to come.

[albay]

Reading this as a conceit of a writer gaining readers and ultimately acclaim (which is the interpretation that really struck me), I'm wondering who danced with you before the others joined in. The only other support that I found for the existence of a significant other was the fact that you received love letters rather than fan letters, but I'm curious if this resonates with you.

[osho]

Reading this as a conceit of a writer gaining readers and ultimately acclaim (which is the interpretation that really struck me), I'm wondering who danced with you before the others joined in. The only other support that I found for the existence of a significant other was the fact that you received love letters rather than fan letters, but I'm curious if this resonates with you.

Not bad. You too joined in. I welcome you and feel obliged for having read my poem, the comment apart.