Thinking of You.

[Delta40]

How the sun blazes
upon al fresco diners
sizzling on the deck.
The crisp lettuce wilts
Ah but it's just garnish
like me, scraped to one side
as if I was your afterthought
while you drone on and on
as educated men oft do,
the hot air wafting
around yellowed latticed blades
whirring above us.
I idly pick at threads
of the once grand leather couch
and realise how the mighty
are fallen
even in furniture.
This cafe.
You.
Clutching my hand,
pressing it to your lips,
hoping I will think of you sometimes.
For every scungy cafe I enter
and order a skinny latte,
I'm sure I will.
Where else would I possibly imagine you?

[YesNo]

Nice description of frustration.

[Delta40]

Thanks Yes/No. I think it expressed how I felt at the time.

[cafolini]

It is difficult to judge a very sentimental piece like this one for those who do not know the history of your expression regarding this. I think it's very consistent about the drone and its indifference to who you were. The last line is precise:Where else would I possibly imagine you? Exactly, within the limitations of exactitude and interpretations. I loved this sentimental piece. Good effort.

[Delta40]

Thanks. I'm jetlagged out of my time zone and think 3 degrees is a gift

[Jerrybaldy]

You don't like men very much, do you? :D

Very ascerbic and tasty, Lesley.

[Delta40]

Lol. Thinking of you now

[Paulclem]

I like that Delta. The details grabbed me and how they dovetailed into personal feelings. Great stuff.

[Haunted]

I felt that I've been there Delta, just a substitute a different diner/restaurant/cafe. The way you present your thoughts is so incisive, it really resonates. BTW why do they always pick a restaurant to break up? Do they expect us to have the appetite to eat anything afterwards?

[Delta40]

Well if she spends all her time with him in a cafe, what other setting should she imagine him in purely to quench his lusty desires? For what purpose will it serve her? Give me a skinny latte thanks....

[osho]

You have an art to give vent to something that goes or else buried beneath our humdrum schedules. I find in you something missing in many others, the talents that can unfurl our suppressions and something that incurably keeps on irking us. Everyone has a little of it and that is why everyone who dwells on your lines finds a bunch of unarticulated expressions. You are a poet, doubtless, but yours is not just wordy as most poets do resonating with certain meters, sounds and rhythm, it goes deeper and deeper to fathom the inner depths of human suffering

[Hawkman]

Hi Delta, This is very good, actually a joy to read, but take a look at L7. The "who is" is both ungainly and unnecessary. Put a comma after "like me," and cut the 'who is'. It'll read much better.

Live and be well - H

[Delta40]

Hawk so good to hear from you and great suggestion