Being deaf can be cool

[An11]

Another offering .....many thanks for reading. All critique most welcome. Thanks everyone
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Drilling at midnight is no fun and was probably even worse for the neighbour. In fact I bet he wished he was deaf like me. I think his patience finally snapped as we drilled what seemed like the billionth hole in the brickwork separating our house from his as we worked to fit those damned electrical sockets. My girlfriend saw him first, waving his arms frantically from the gloomy darkness of his garden trying to attract our attention.

“What does he want?” She asked me as we looked down on our neighbour through the bedroom window as he danced a jig to accompany the wind mill like motions of his arms.

“Not sure, but I think he is trying to get our attention,” I replied staring down.

“How long will you be?” He mouthed silently upwards in our direction, carefully emphasising each word to ensure we understood the importance of his message.

“We could murder one, thank you,” mouthed my girlfriend back, beating me to the more appropriate response I was preparing.

“One sugar please,” she added smiling through the window at the confused looking pyjama clad figure in the garden next door.

My girlfriend enrolled for lip reading classes the following week and I didn’t feel like a cup of tea anyway.

[jayat]

I would say shorten the sentences. I was told not to enlarge them, when I was learning English. I had to read three times your snaky propositions to understand their sense fully. The second sentence's got 30 words or so. However, it's just an opinion. Finally, I can't see the meaning at the end. Some kind of tricky story? It may be my lack of knowledge... Anyway, It looks quite coherent and well-expressed. Well...That's all.

[Delta40]

This brought a smile to my face. She uses the deafness of her boyfriend for her own entertainment without quite appreciating his needs.

Great line: “What does he want?” She asked me as we looked down on our neighbour through the bedroom window as he danced a jig to accompany the wind mill like motions of his arms

This would be a much better story if you fleshed it out more.

[An11]

Many thanks for the feedback folks. I have tried to tighten it up a bit and add more info to the meaning at the end in line with your feedback. Please do let me know your thoughts.
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Drilling at midnight is no fun and was probably even worse for the neighbour. In fact I bet he wished he was deaf like me. I think his patience finally snapped as we drilled what seemed like the billionth hole in the brickwork separating our house from his. Fitting it those damned electrical sockets is a laborious and noisy business.

My girlfriend saw him first, waving his arms frantically from the gloomy darkness of his garden trying to attract our attention.

“What does he want?” She asked me as we looked down on our neighbour through the bedroom window as he danced a jig to accompany the wind mill like motions of his arms.

“Not sure, but I think he is trying to get our attention,” I replied staring down.

“How long will you be?” He mouthed silently upwards in our direction, carefully emphasising each word to ensure we understood the importance of his message.

I looked down at my watch, and then at our neighbour now standing still, arms outstretched towards us waiting impatiently for a reply.

“Time to call it a night,” I thought as I prepared the response that would allow him to sleep.

But my girlfriend beat me to it.

“We could murder one, thank you,” she mouthed back through the window

“One sugar please,” she added emphasising each word to ensure the confused looking pyjama clad figure got the finer detail.

“Isn’t he kind, a cup of tea would be lovely wouldn't it?” She added, turning to me for a nod of agreement that never came.

Not being deaf, my girlfriend didn’t have much experience in lip reading, so perhaps she could be excused for mistaking “how long will you be” for “do you want a cup of tea."

Despite my best efforts, it took a few weeks to get back on speaking terms with our neighbour.

[YesNo]

I didn't understand the "We could murder one." Is this a local way of accepting a gift? You might add more of these to clarify the locality.

I was puzzled why they were working so late except to annoy the neighbor.

[An11]

Thanks for the questions, really helpful.

"We could murder one" is a local way of saying " We really really want one" ......(local to the UK, central at least)

In my mind, they were working so late as they were renovating the house to a tight schedule so I think I perhaps needed to make that clearer