After Reading Junot Diaz... I wonder

[miyako73]

I wonder if the opening paragraph below sounds interesting as the beginning of an existentialist, erotic, ethnographic, autobiographical novel?

"My friggin struggle, my goddam redemption. What God messed up, I fixed. Such a comedy it was divine, my life. "

[islandclimber]

You should check out Agotá Kristóf's trilogy The Notebook; The Proof; The Third Lie... Lacking the autobiographical aspect yet all the same... Or some of the first person narrative sections of Nádas' Parallel Stories... William Gass' The Tunnel.

I don't so much like the use of the colloquialism friggin as the second word. It seems as though it's purposefully trying to avoid profanity, as though quite forced. The same with the rearranging of The Divine Comedy, it seems forced. I think you could rework this to be more violent or heavy, which seems to be the intent, and more original to an extent. Profanity is appropriate at times, here might be a place for that...

That being said, I love "What God messed up, I fixed." Fantastic depth behind that line as it can mean so many things, being left so open-ended.