Late Knowledge

[Lykren]

The moon over the sea
of lights rose like a bead
of foam in still black water.

Its simple glow held our gaze
and returned to us the empty streets
freshly bathed in wintry light.

While we walked the darkness
sundered us; but what we saw,
we saw illuminated. Pale forms
stretched out and made us guess.

Then startled by our solitude
we turned and sought to grasp
the other's arm. Finally the light
began to warm; and as we
saw the end, we stopped
and rested, thinking, each,
to think a while
and let the other know
just what we had discovered.

Thanks for commenting!

[Lykren]

A last request for comments before I let this thread go.

[Delta40]

I read it ok? lol. Do not like the word 'sundered' - or place a comma after 'walked'

should it read: and returned us to the empty streets. I only ask because after being taken in by the wonderful glow, one is returned to the wintry scene to see it in a new light. Anyway, I rather enjoyed it, it a simple but effective way.

[Lykren]

Thanks for reading and your insights. Hesitant to change this one, but I may revisit it somehow.

[Buh4Bee]

I like this one too. It is engaging, without being overdone. Although almost too floral, I think you succeed in creating a pretty setting. I like it as is, but there are better people on her for that kind of feedback.