PDA

View Full Version : chin up



cacian
01-04-2013, 01:26 PM
Harry
hurry
try not to bury
thy furtive
fury
under a Perry,
all light
and airy
is best
when very,
anger must carry
not your worry,
let out
be merry and lest you be
the cherry
that topples the berry!

islandclimber
01-04-2013, 09:21 PM
This comes across as rather nursery "rhymesque"... not necessarily in a good way, to put it gently. The rhyme scheme you've used is quite grating. Especially with the brevity of the lines. It reads like nonsense? Was this the intent?

cacian
01-05-2013, 05:31 AM
islandclimber thank you for reading. The intent was for the rhyme to keep coming back with a pun.
It is also meant to be a 'joke' or a teaser if you like.