Three Haiku

[Jassy Melson]

rain carving craters
sunshine creating shadows
silence filling both


outside my window
birds chirping in loud hunger
arouses my own


cloudless sky up there
hot sun beaming down on me
sweat drips on the plow

[Calidore]

I especially like the first one very much.

[Jassy Melson]

So do I

[Lykren]

The first and third here, in particular, seemed to really fit the form.

[Jassy Melson]

I did "force" the second one. It is not as spontaneous as the first and third ones; it's more calculated.

[Paulclem]

I like all three - the first one is my favourite.

[Jassy Melson]

The first one seems to be the "best" haiku, although I would be at a loss to say what makes one haiku better than another.

[hillwalker]

I'm not a fan of haiku because most who attempt to write it concentrate on structure rather than content. But I think in this instance you've got the combination just about right: an almost perfect illustration of how to go about it, short of writing it in Japanese.

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[tallonrk1]

Wow! The first Haiku spoke to me, brilliant!

[Jassy Melson]

Thank you for your comments. The thing about composing haiku is that one must "force" oneself to be spontaneous. This is difficult to achieve. In my opinion, the haiku is the "purest" form of poetry.