Poem influenced by studying Left-Hand Path group "Dragon Rogue founded by t.karlsson

[scrotera777]

Aphrodite consumed by her whorish lust
this quintessence of her unjust,I sent the astral whore back to the cosmic dust
Jormundgandr the ancient wise serpent
actor,faker,deceiver,fraud,hypocrite,gypsy or simply just smarter than all?
Close the eye of sheva,once and forever all!
see into the sacred crystal ball
thoughts of the free and chaos start to take their mighty form
finally you reach Vanaheim and meet your true self
Poised to vanity a world upon the invocation of NAAMAH
likened to Nehemiah,Jonah,Noah and the oh so apparently falsified sacred Babylon

the great mighty whore!
revelation just like all literalists of imagination
zodiacal constellation of just a new age THAGIRION
non-Pythagorean?
yet a post-Pythagorean new era
likened when the mighty Ljusalfheim lived before yet after the common era
faeries of the astral sky?
give me a frequent and high etheric plane level crossing supply
Predetermined coincidences keep chaos chaotic yet systematically controlled =)
Paradox of life,life of paradoxes!

[hillwalker]

Titles are normally one way of getting someone to click on a thread and read what's on offer. Unfortunately you seem to preface your poetry with over-wrought labels that are likely to keep most readers away.

Having tried to read through your 'poem' perhaps that's for the best. It's a complete muddle. Rather like standing on the side of a railway track and trying to read a newspaper held by someone inside a passing carriage. No doubt it means something to you, but you don't have the ability to share your thoughts with others on this evidence.

H

[scrotera777]

8542for one thing i never write sober,i write on either amphetamines,lsd.cocaine,ketamine,dxm....plus look on the other site i posted this on they got it....check the pic-comments

[hillwalker]

But they didn't 'get' it -

One calls it dark and negative, with much of the writing 'above' him yet still 'Creative and unique' - another was dazzled by the 'smorgasbord of rambunctiousness' and the third couldn't understand most of the words but still enjoyed it (don't quite understand how).

The point is, I'm sure no one on here cares what people on other sites think about your poetry. It's like claiming that your next-door neighbour's gardener loves your poem so I must be wrong if I don't feel the same way.

I'm giving my opinion in response to you posting work on here seeking feedback. If you don't agree you're at liberty to ignore or explain why I might be misguided - using cogent argument rather than rounding up 'positive' responses from another site. Telling me others feel differently is a pointless exercise because it won't suddenly make me change my mind. I don't see any positive responses on here so far. What does that tell you?

As for the state of intoxication you reached before posting your work on here - is that meant to be an excuse for the muddled writing? If so, it's not acceptable. Perhaps you should wait until you're sober before pressing the 'Submit' button. Then you might think twice and spare us.

H

[scrotera777]

i purposely never write sober....to find certain knowledge drugs are needed,the double helix was discovered whilst on lsd...you seem to be missing my whole point but yes you are right i cant write down on paper how i feel,if i could write just pure honesty in laymens terms i would,and im a defensive person like i look at the lengths i went to try to prove something to you that didnt need proving,and after like an hr of acting like i do i see its immature but at the time i honestly had to reply the way i did-childlishly,the disorder i got mainly affects relationships with people i care way too much about what every single person thinks that i go to lengths to impress people who dont like me whilst ignoring people who actually accept me for who i am,all a contradiction,anyways just had my adhd meds dexamphetamime so ill admit everything,i know im wrong usually yet i still like to make out im not giving a false sense of ego,anyways perhaps ill try writing something new for this board that i havent tried before,i always have to over complicate and make ridiculos methaphors about things that are so not even worth writing about lol...sorry if ive appeared arrogant or disrespectful in anyway honestly not intended mate im not someone who likes conflict,nor do i like internet keyboard warriors who make threats etc just a nice guy that over analyzes every littlething...peace =)

[miyako73]

This has a potential. You have the ability to create a flow. A flow is not only about babbles and noises. Try editing it while you are sober.

[Delta40]

I agree with Miyako. I don't know whether alcohol and drugs are really much help to you creatively - they may enable you to spew out stuff but once they're in the world, you need to be focused so you can arrange them for the audience.

[hillwalker]

Ok - first, thanks for a dignified response. You don't have to impress people on here who 'don't like' you because we don't 'like' or 'dislike' anybody who posts stuff on here. All we know about you is the writing you share on here. Whatever other info you choose to impart is neither here nor there. It's all about the writing.

Second, try pressing the 'Enter' key now and again so your blocks of text are broken up. White spaces like I've used here makes it easier to read online.

Thirdly - chill out. So you're high on drugs when you write your poetry. That's immaterial. But I'd advise you to keep whatever you write under wraps until you sober up then have a quick read before sticking it on the world-wide web.

Fourth - I'm as much of a nonentity as anyone else on here so you don't have to prove anything to me. Honest.

H

[Calidore]

I agree with Miyako. I don't know whether alcohol and drugs are really much help to you creatively - they may enable you to spew out stuff but once they're in the world, you need to be focused so you can arrange them for the audience.

Third. Plus, if you're actually mixing these drugs with prescription psychotropic medications on a regular basis, you're asking for a lot worse than muddled writing. For your own sake, take some care.

[Jerrybaldy]

Hill lied as he is not a nonentity. Well he is, in so far as you willl never meet him. But meeting people is overated. Feedback wise there is nobody better.

[WolfLarsen]

I thought this **** was pretty cool! Maybe some of the traditionalists on the site should try using whatever 777 is on! Maybe it will help them write something more creative! Way to go 777! Finally some creativity!

No it wasn't perfect. I'm surprised that nobody mentioned the goddamn ryhmes – rhyming in contemporary poetry sucks! Other than that excellent poem!

I'd like to see some of the traditionalists do something better! It seems that some traditionalists seem to hate everything that isn't dry and proper and boring.

Keep posting 777!