I will wait for you

[Sumz Nini]

When clouds are moving,
I look carefully,
to catch a glance from you,
When the wind is blowing,
I listen carefully,
to hear a sound from you..

But,,
You are not there,
I know ..
You will not be there,
But I wait for you...
and I will wait for you....

[hillwalker]

Another nicely understated poem - simple but effective.

H

[Buh4Bee]

A romantic piece that is still uplifting, even though it is softly sorrowful.

[Hawkman]

I think you mean "glimpse, not "glance". You could say, "catch a glance from you".

Live and be well - H

[Sumz Nini]

Thank You Hillwalker & Buh4Bee.. @ Hawkman, yes it should be so.. Thank you.. :)

[Pete Ak]

Actually SN, I, like you (initially), would have gone with 'glance' as you're talking about catching a brief look FROM the object. If you're talking about looking FOR the object then catching a 'glimpse of' him/her would feel right to me. You've already told us you are 'looking carefully' and I take it that what you're looking for is that he or she is sneaking looks at you! In that vein you may consider searching for a more poetic voice in the last line of that first stanza... "to catch a glance" seems to me much more poetic than "to hear a sound from you" and I wonder if it may feel more consistent with something like 'to descry your whisper" (That may be absolute ****e but I hope you can see what I mean. None of this review should detract from a rather beautiful piece that doesn't try too hard yet impresses nevertheless. My suggestion may ruin that effect!!

[Sumz Nini]

Actually SN, I, like you (initially), would have gone with 'glance' as you're talking about catching a brief look FROM the object. If you're talking about looking FOR the object then catching a 'glimpse of' him/her would feel right to me. You've already told us you are 'looking carefully' and I take it that what you're looking for is that he or she is sneaking looks at you! In that vein you may consider searching for a more poetic voice in the last line of that first stanza... "to catch a glance" seems to me much more poetic than "to hear a sound from you" and I wonder if it may feel more consistent with something like 'to descry your whisper" (That may be absolute ****e but I hope you can see what I mean. None of this review should detract from a rather beautiful piece that doesn't try too hard yet impresses nevertheless. My suggestion may ruin that effect!!

Thank you.. for your comment :)
actually, "I look carefully" because I need him to look at me & I'm not going to look that's why i used " glance from you"
but I like to change my last line into "to hear a whispering" or something...

[WolfLarsen]

Love stinks!

But I like the poem anyway. Somebody who I usually disagree with said the poem was simple, understating, and good. I agree!

The poem was delicious!

But love still stinks! Love is just a bunch of chemical reactions in our brains that spread throughout our bodies and make you feel good so that you'll reproduce, raise some brats, and put up with somebody long enough to raise the damn brats.

I doubt what a female Homo sapiens feels for her children is much different than what a mommy rat feels for her little rats.

Nobody's worth waiting for. Like the song says: "love the one you're with!"

Anyway, thank you for the poem. I'm hungry for more!

[Sumz Nini]

Love stinks!

But I like the poem anyway. Somebody who I usually disagree with said the poem was simple, understating, and good. I agree!

The poem was delicious!

But love still stinks! Love is just a bunch of chemical reactions in our brains that spread throughout our bodies and make you feel good so that you'll reproduce, raise some brats, and put up with somebody long enough to raise the damn brats.

I doubt what a female Homo sapiens feels for her children is much different than what a mommy rat feels for her little rats.

Nobody's worth waiting for. Like the song says: "love the one you're with!"

Anyway, thank you for the poem. I'm hungry for more!


Thank you...!! but does love really stink..?? I don't think so. :)