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Little Gal
11-22-2012, 11:49 AM
He found me a pearl and does not want to know if I have lost it
or ever looked at it
He lets me swim, a happy fish on a wave,
takes me to where the sands end...
He never asks.
He tells me stories of me...
The Empress-Me, the Mermaid-Me,
The Frog-Me
I lose wood for fire. We shiver with the grass together.
Night comes, night thickens, night sinks,
We listen to dawn breaking with the winds..
He holds my shadow in his arms
Careful, as if it would spill
He does not want to know where my boat went down
We are going to find strong oars once it's morning.

hillwalker
11-22-2012, 12:53 PM
Deceptively simple.
I can't explain why I like this so much -

He holds my shadow in his arms
Careful, as if it would spill

Lovely image - great piece of writing.

H

cafolini
11-22-2012, 01:53 PM
I agree with H about this one. There is no possible alternative to this good relationship without getting into ambiguity. A postmodern piece.

Delta40
11-22-2012, 05:03 PM
I thought this was a lovely read Little Gal and great imagery. The red font seemed out of sync with the poem though.

Bar22do
11-22-2012, 05:40 PM
Little Wave, this is absolutely adorable, wonderfully written (except for the red font!), I love it from the first to the last word! it's an outstanding poem, Gal!

Eiseabhal
11-23-2012, 06:36 PM
Ores or oars ?

Little Gal
11-25-2012, 03:43 AM
Deceptively simple.
I can't explain why I like this so much -

He holds my shadow in his arms
Careful, as if it would spill

Lovely image - great piece of writing.

H

I thank you... this one is very, very close to my heart... and I can't help feeling glad at any word of appreciation.

Little Gal
11-25-2012, 03:44 AM
@Delta...

I am sorry about the color... I have a particular fascination for red ..
And thank you! :)

Little Gal
11-25-2012, 03:46 AM
I agree with H about this one. There is no possible alternative to this good relationship without getting into ambiguity. A postmodern piece.

:) thank you..

Little Gal
11-25-2012, 03:48 AM
Little Wave, this is absolutely adorable, wonderfully written (except for the red font!), I love it from the first to the last word! it's an outstanding poem, Gal!

I love being called 'little wave'... it makes me extraordinarily happy! :) thank you so much, your words are always so straight and clear, saying what they mean...
I wish u happiness... :)

Little Gal
11-25-2012, 11:07 AM
yeah 'oars' ... thank you :)

Buh4Bee
11-28-2012, 04:52 PM
Very intimate. A good read.

Jerrybaldy
11-29-2012, 03:42 AM
Very feminine and many good mataphors and I have to agree with Hill...


He holds my shadow in his arms
Careful, as if it would spill


is sublime.


I am not sure where the boat ends and you begin. Nor do I have to be. Its a great poem.

JB

Little Gal
11-29-2012, 10:33 PM
Very intimate. A good read.

Thank you so much... feels incomplete without a word from you!

Little Gal
11-29-2012, 10:36 PM
Very feminine and many good mataphors and I have to agree with Hill...



is sublime.


I am not sure where the boat ends and you begin. Nor do I have to be. Its a great poem.

JB

JB... I cannot thank you enough... loved your words " I am not sure where the boat ends and you begin. Nor do I have to be." Am so tired of people asking for explanations for everything... it is a relief to let things be a little on their own!