Talking back.

[Sreenan]

It is a slab of contemplation
To forever always drag out and drain
Grace's utterly pretty, sparkle filled
But hopeful wondering and tired eyes
Of all their soft wishes; wide dreams...

The deep of her mind whispers...

'Them hindering scenes; those hollow bangs, thuds
And screeching, slashing - so silent - screams
Drip through my memories fickle, severed artery:
A part of me intricately planned - it must be said,
Through warranted and the utmost warmly bitterness
- to miraculously slip away from its muddled grip,
To dodge the drowning that menacingly lurched before me then.'

[Delta40]

I'm not sure that 'severed artery' flows where you have placed it but it's an important expression nevertheless.

Do you mean 'a part of me' rather than 'apart' as in separate?

Through warranted - do you mean 'though warranted'?

I'm not sure that 'warmly bitterness' works either

I love the dramatis of the poem but make sure the structure and sense of the poem doesn't break down along the way

[Sreenan]

Thank you for the feedback. It was suppose to be 'a part of me' but I often completely miss things like that. The poem is a little experimental, much of my earlier stuff is different/traditional.