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Dark Muse
11-14-2012, 03:49 AM
The Girl Who Fled From Beauty

She watched beauty from afar,
it appeared as something alien to her,
she felt no envy of it,
it was too distant from her,
that it became only an abstract concept.

Moths fluttered in her head
in soft soundless whispers,
she watched the world fade
with a child-like sense of wonder,
she knew not of fear
for it is only a delusion.

Yet she lived in a world of illusion,
she liked to pluck the stars
out of the sky and they became her eyes,
until in time they burned out,
she never understood that she was
supposed to feel pain.

She hid behind glass walls
for others could only see
reflections of what they already believe,
and she was distorted in their eyes.

It was impossible to brush against her
without losing something,
she was a thief of souls and visions,
she liked to collect tokens and trinkets,
of lives so she could examine them
out of context and make patchwork quilts
and recreations that she absorbed
into her pores.

She spoke only in tongues
not out of divinity
Sainthood would terrify her
she did not live for purity
though she was one of the untouched.

So beauty continued to haunt her
and elude her dreams,
but if ever she drew close enough to touch it
she would shudder away in repulsion.

cafolini
11-14-2012, 09:43 PM
Beauty is a castle in the air. ~ Anatole France

MystyrMystyry
11-15-2012, 05:46 AM
Excellent!

Dark Muse
11-15-2012, 05:56 AM
Thank you

Sreenan
11-18-2012, 01:53 PM
I like this poem. A good choice of words, not at all pretentious (always a plus,) and really flows well. What I mean by that is that it is easy to go through and doesn't make you go over and over it again, that isn't me saying it is of poor quality by the way, just another way of saying that it isn't confusing as I tend to find a lot of poetry confusing at first glance! Overall the second and final stanzas stand out most for me!

Dark Muse
11-18-2012, 02:21 PM
Thank you very much, and yes I can understand what you mean. I read somethings myself sometimes in which I feel quite cluless in grasping the meaning. Since this one is a bit surreal I am glad you do not find it too confussing to read.

Delta40
11-18-2012, 04:55 PM
I like it but you do say she knows nothing of fear and later say that sainthood would terrify her. There is also some confusion with tense which needs revising. Otherwise I like the surreal quality also Dark Muse.