Cycle of life

[Anomandaris]

Light fades,my heart is bleak,
Love is gone,all wept in sorrow.
The mind fails,the body weak,
Life is now covered by a shadow.
Death,and I'm overrunned,
By grief,reigning fear,
Feelings are so strong and I'm stunned,
And there is no man left sincere.
Darkest night,I feel so cold,
All is fading now...
Sunrise came,just as fortold,
Darkness lifted from my brow.
With the new day - no more detest
But when sun sets - again unrest

[Hawkman]

I'm afraid this leaves me thinking of a character from The Fast Show who was a manic-depressive artist who kept hurling his easel away and saying, "Everything is black.... black.... black!"

I'm afraid the comic tone is somewhat emphasised by the aberration of, "overrunned" to rhyme with "stunned." So, something of a rather tongue in cheek modern sonnet then...

It'll be interesting to see what else is on the menu.

Live and be well - H

[Anomandaris]

Well thank you H so here another one but it's not quite finished so don't judge too hard

Eternity
Your beauty is unrivaled I avow,
For that I will grant you with my bow.
But all took was just a little glance
And a vortex of emotions - plunged me into trance.
Madness swirls into the air,
To your shrine - a lonely prayer.
Every move is filled with grace,
And every shadow hides a trace
Of intimacy followed by despaire
Because that burden I could not more bare.
For that I'll shed a lonely tear,
And leave these lands without a fear.

Upon returning I felt a growing dread
And when I reached my home I saw you dead...
My dusk has come - and endless night
But then I saw you in the light!
I watch it now - and empty shell
So worn and fragile,but who could tell
That joy will fill me when I die
No sorrow now - and no more cry!

[Hawkman]

You might want to run a spell checker over it and pay a little attention to grammar and syntax. The metre's a little ragged too. A tip. If it is your intention to parody archaic styles for humorous effect, then that's one thing, but if you are serious about poetry, read some contemporary poets as well as the classics. You might find it beneficial to do a little reading about how to write poetry as well. I can recommend Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Travelled as a good place to start.

[Anomandaris]

Ok thank you and I am serious about it but I am studying english for just a few years and my grammar and spelling are improving at the moment