Sinking

[Delta40]

Somewhere the waves
of dreams break.
That inner child screams
and throws
coloured blocks
through the window
as half rainbows
reach spring's end.
My clarity; lays, flat
in a burning desert
of thoughts,
thirsting for inky droplets
to complete my spectrum of light.
Possibilites slowly cease to be.
I stumble,
lost in a labryrinth
of terra incognita.

[Hawkman]

Hi Delta. An expressive poem this, but I do wonder in what sense you are using "lays." Did you mean lies as in lying on, or are you using it in the sense of a narrative poem or ballad? The mention of "thirsting for inky droplets..." would make this a possible interpretation. However, if this was your intention then the punctuation would need addressing. "My clarity; lays, flat in a burning desert..." It would interesting to think that this was what you wanted to covey. Even so, I kind of get the impression this is a poem about the will to write and feeling unable to. A nice take on the subject.

Live and be well - H

[Delta40]

Your interpretation is very good Hawk. I'm heading for another barren phase...

[DieterM]

Involuntarily, the title made me think of that The Cure-song I've always loved, you know, the one called "Sinking" ("I am slowing down/As the years go by/I am sinking/So I trick myself/Like everybody else…"). And I was surprised, in a positive way, like when you expect to eat one of our favourite meals and someone serves you an unknown recipe you immediately like. There might be an "e" missing in "somewhere", btw. And "lays" puzzled me no end, until I read Hawk's comment (and checked secondary meanings of the word). But as I'm not a native speaker, those online-dictionares are constantly open in my browser, so it was no sweat (and surely no waste of time; as long as I learn something new, I'm happy). Anyway, I liked the emotions your poem made well up in me, perfectly like a Cure-song… particularly liked the image of the child throwing those coloured blocks…

[Delta40]

Oops! thanks for the correction Dieter and the kind review.

[Charles Darnay]

This one I can certainly relate to on an artistically-personal level. I wonder if throwing coloured blocks through my window would help set things going.

Excellent myriad of images in this one!

[Delta40]

Thank you Charles

[MystyrMystyry]

Delta! Delta! Delta! :)