a thrill

[cacian]

I like my day
to be a great teller of faith
maybe because I like
to state
everything has a meaning quest
to seek
to see
to try to be
it is all a prix
the cost of which
is within me
I am the free
the will to be
nothing else is
better or was
sincere of most
I am the cost


I like my day to be the
wheel to my surreal
the dreams I deal
the sighs I seal
everything from minutes
to here
solemnly dear
is up to me
nothing is less
lesser or least
privileges are my
serene
I seek them out
to be my thrill
and lay them out
to be my will
everything else is
by- the -by
passive and past

[Maximilianus]

I would correct a few spellings, namely:


ceal -> seal
solemly -> solemnly
privilegdes -> privileges

Other than that, I find it quite genuine and expressive of your feelings http://smiles.kolobok.us/artists/laie/LaieA_060.gif

[cacian]

Maximilianus I thank you for reading and the corrections.
I am most grateful.
Thank you for the genuine feedback :)
Oh and I am liking the emoticon it is cute haha.

[Bar22do]

Simple, sincere, and what a Goal! cacian!

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

The rhymes are kind of lame, honestly. It comes off almost Dr. Seuss-ish.

[cacian]

Thank you Bar22do and I am sorry Mutatis if this did not rhyme up to rise.