Harry

[Jerrybaldy]

Harry, he's dead, bless him,
I think he was screwing my wife.
Must get cat food,
meat like Harry, fishy like Edna.
Must feed the fish.
They hated cat food.
Must cut my toe nails,
they are slicing my socks.
Missing Harry,
he was like a brother,
think he was doing my sister.
Must buy socks.
Saw Harry yesterday,
feeding the ducks.
I like Harry.
Fat dead c unt.
Must buy bacon.

[Hawkman]

Greetings, JB. I must say, I rather like this. The humour is a bit course, but then you are the Vox Pupli, aren't you? ;) LOL! No, I really do like it. The only suggestion I would make is that putting it into two line stanzas would create a nice pause between the elements and give the leapfrog thoughts and asides more impact. I'd make the odd line at the end it's own stanza.

Live long and prosper - H

[Twota]

it's really nice lol :D

[Delta40]

One can definitely see the thought connection between each line Jerry. A guy in a cardboard box here...

[Haunted]

How hard it is to push something so vile out of our minds, to the point of denial. Engaging in other activities is certainly a distraction, still it keeps coming back. It's so real.

[Bar22do]

Well said, Jerry. Kill consciousness - with a boomerang.