Paths True Light

[tadkins19]

PATHS TRUE LIGHT

Here I walk through a stormy day
Till I glance toward the sky and had to say
I will make it to that starry night
To find the truth behind this path that lay tonight

I take this journey on winter wings
To understand the simplicity of simple things
Time gets shorter and days feel longer
As my mind grows weaker my body gets stronger

As these trials come to an end
I shall ascend
Into that starry night
As unto my soul this path has shone it’s TRUE LIGHT

[hillwalker]

I'm sorry to treat your first post the same way I treat the dozens of other aspiring writers' first poems on here when they decide it's better their poem rhymes than makes sense.

Writing about abstract things like 'finding inspiration' is difficult enough. It's like writing about love. Unless you can come up with something truly original there's not much point because we've heard it all before. But to make things even worse by sticking to a rigid rhyme scheme does you no favours.

Would you have written this differently if you hadn't needed to have a word that rhymed at the end of every line? I'm hoping the answer is 'Yes'.

Poetry doesn't have to rhyme. If rhyme is used correctly it adds something extra to the poem. If it's used without much thought then it's distracting and usually ends up undermining whatever it is you were trying to say.

My advice - keep writing, but also try reading as much poetry as you can to see how contemporary writers are able to create something memorable without resorting to rhyme.

H