short poem

[fairice]

mangled dog's eyes beneath Venus, who lies
tangled in thorns. sparrows aloft, baking under
fangled Tuscan frescoes

[Revolte]

Oh wow, I love this, though I haven't figured it all out yet. But that's a good thing, I think.

My only suggestion, and it's for personal reasons, would be to capitalize mangled and sparrows. And put a period after frescoes.