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hannaheliza
10-22-2012, 02:19 PM
The fence is a pleasant place to sit -
I see things I was blind to before.
And I should be pulled to either side
but still the fence is where I sit.

I could sit here every day -
And avoid the watching eye
Of people judging what choice I make
Yes, the fence is where I sit.

It felt uncomfortable at first -
Like I should be somewhere else
But after time I grew to enjoy
The fence where I now sit.

I won’t pretend that this is forever -
I know that I will have to choose.
Until my departure looms
On the fence is where I live.

jambojersey
10-22-2012, 03:30 PM
Hello Hannaheliza, I enjoyed your Poem Please join Us @
http://www.world-poems.net/modules/yogurt/index.php?uid=85
Regards Your Friend : Anthony Fry / jambojersey.

Delta40
10-22-2012, 08:00 PM
Anthony Fry aka jambojersey, a vagabond poet indeed! Fancy trying to pilfer poets from another forum!

jambojersey
10-23-2012, 02:25 AM
I was just trying to help out by opening another option.
I only post my poetry there amongst others.
The internet is a "World Wide Web" Get on.
One thing that has come to the fore now is "Share" On The Net.
Maybe it should be added here to avoid silly "OLD" statements like this.:)

Delta40
10-23-2012, 06:25 AM
You're right of course. One could easily interpret your post as if you were asking him to leave Lit-Net and join your website instead because his poem was so great. Obviously that isn't your intention. You want him to post here AND on your site. My apologies.

hillwalker
10-23-2012, 06:33 AM
23 posts in 4 years?

It begs the question what attracted you to this particular poem - and why you suddenly took it upon yourself to offer this advice to a newbie.

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hannaheliza
10-23-2012, 07:19 AM
I hope you guys enjoyed my poem because it's my first attempt at posting on a forum so would appreciate constructive criticism and comments. It isn't here to cause dispute. :)

vinoy chandy
10-23-2012, 07:26 AM
I hope this doesn't give you a better opinion from others because it lacks soul

Delta40
10-23-2012, 09:10 AM
I don't think S4 makes sense. 'Until my departure looms' clashes with 'I won't pretend that this is forever'. It's a harmless, light poem which ironically doesn't pull me either way!

hannaheliza
10-23-2012, 09:35 AM
I'm glad you think that! This poem was literally written and posted in the space of 5 minutes so there is not a lot of substance to it, it is what it is. :)