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angliholic
10-17-2012, 06:14 AM
The sky today is very slate blue
and all I want to do is bury my sorrow
in the soil along with some daisy seeds before it's too late
Maybe they may grow together into delightful yellow
the whole winter through

Bar22do
10-17-2012, 07:08 PM
nicely put...!

Silas Thorne
10-17-2012, 07:30 PM
A lovely hopeful poem. Welcome back! :)

I'm not sure about 'very' in the first line. Maybe something descriptive, like 'hard' or 'harsh'? Don't want to give you words, keep your own, just maybe not 'very'.

Buh4Bee
10-17-2012, 09:01 PM
simple and sweet