Swaying over sleep

[Astromaxis]

body defies gravity
defies the conscious point
enters into the depth of well
gradually beckoning kisses and crumbs
to exit and enter
as one pleased

surreptitious-obvious a hybridization
cross-pollination of wake and shutdown
the neutrality-extremity of walking over water
strangled-mangled-invigorated-ecstatic
lover's gaze
mute portraits
monochrome on matches blazing away

my ballet bustle strings along a dressed nudity
passionately and calmly the dancing throbs

in the slumbers of crossovers
pitch-forked sensations and mirrors
the endlessly limited world
within subjective and understood commons. ▬

[hillwalker]

It starts off reasonably - line 1 is fine - but then it turned increasingly into a demonstration of your erudition rather than a poem.
From lines 7 onwards it became over-blown and self-consciously impenetrable. Presumably you had fun writing it but it was unreadable.

H

[Astromaxis]

I was talking of the phenomenon of drowsiness and also of light sleep. The criss-cross lines of intangibility and tangibility. I am not trying to demonstrate anything especially my erudition. I am sorry it was unreadable to you but this is an experimentation in poetry writing. I am not the best but I am going to keep on trying different poems.

[Freudian Monkey]

What a fascinating poem. Very puzzling at times, but not unreadable by any means. Keep on writing, you're doing a phenomenal job.

[Jeos]

You are ab-so-lu-te-ly right. There are different kinds of contemporary poetry, some are (unless you are very well informed about author's personal life) quite hermetic.
Some people are easily disturbed when someone leaves the rails of usual discursive reasoning...
It's true that compared to Gauguin's, Miro's art might seem "unreadable".
In fact for me the only unreadable lines are the most readable ones:"as one pleased" and "within subjective and understood commons."
congratulations for your guts.

[Astromaxis]

Thank you so much :)

[Delta40]

I particularly liked, cross pollination of wake and shutdown