suspension

[cacian]

kerr-ching!
the ball has rolled across
the lawn
will it go north jolt
to solo and forlorn?
or will it strike luck
bounce right up and then halt?
mid air supense
is wild
daring and tempered.

[rosana]

That is such a graphic way of expressing how you feel about uncertainty!
when i read it the first time all i could say was :wow i can feel the motions
later i went out to my backyard and imagined children were in it and i felt young also and excited and playful of course having to write this has tempered somewhat the feelings

[rosana]

cacian i like your poem very much
i am leaving this forum there are not more poems in it like yours
yours was a jewel hard to find


i dont think i have to explain any further

take care and than you

[cacian]

cacian i like your poem very much
i am leaving this forum there are not more poems in it like yours
yours was a jewel hard to find


i dont think i have to explain any further

take care and than you

rosana I sorry tohear that you are leaving.
You have just started.
I look forward to more poetry to read from you.
let me PM you.

[rosana]

i am not happy with the comment i made before i think i missed your point which was excitemente: how it can dwindle and wane or increment its pitch

I think i owed you a decent summary

the word ketching at the start I am not sure of ...

the dictionary says its a small two masted sailboat ; did you mean to refer to the two possibilities of excitement: wane or kindle ?

Or did you specifically want to address erotic desire or evoke penises
and was the word suspension used as erection ?

i rather not use the word ketching because it leaves me out from your audience and its too bad because the poem is good without that

i think i owed this to you

love ,rosana

[cacian]

Hi rosana
Ketching is just an expression a bit like when you press on a till machine and it makes that sound as the drawer of money opens.
I meant here as a sound effect to indicate the sudden move of the golf ball.
This is anything but erotic it is more a play on words.
It is about tension mounting as one kicks that ball will it go sway? will it pocket ? or will suspend in the air is what I meant by this.

[hillwalker]

I think the word you were looking for is 'kerr-ching'.

A 'ketch' is a boat and to the best of my knowledge there's no such verb.

H

[cacian]

I think the word you were looking for is 'kerr-ching'.

A 'ketch' is a boat and to the best of my knowledge there's no such verb.

H

Hi hillwalker thank you for this.
Haha I got it totally wrong.