break or make

[cacian]

the pin dropped
a hint of loss
cruscendo sort
the sound it drew
profoundly tossed into
a void
nothing was gold

I searched my
life to what it was
the clock
the wall
the time
the world
suddenly jammed
onto a halt

I looked for cause
a way to shake it
all from dull

a music tune
awoke my thoughts
a light appeared
from underneath the
loss

quickly
I caught the reason
why
then let it flew out
to the far

I rest assured
it was a plaud
a break or make
and that was all

[Jeos]

I like your very very particular style Cacian. There is just that "nothing was gold" ... I would have avoided it.

[cacian]

I like your very very particular style Cacian. There is just that "nothing was gold" ... I would have avoided it.

Hi Jeos so glad you liked this one.
I did actually drop the'nothing was gold' as a last minute sound effect.
I wonder why you do no think it goes there.
I wanted to suggest after the sound disappeared into the void, just for that one minute the 'nothingness felt golden'
There is an expression that you might have heard of
'silence is gold' and in French 'Le silence est d'or'.

[Jeos]

Hi Jeos so glad you liked this one.
I did actually drop the'nothing was gold' as a last minute sound effect.
I wonder why you do no think it goes there.
I wanted to suggest after the sound disappeared into the void, just for that one minute the 'nothingness felt golden'
There is an expression that you might have heard of
'silence is gold' and in French 'Le silence est d'or'.

Then why not write downright "silence" ... do not be afraid of the "cliché" criticism. Or even why not introduce a sentence from another language - french in this case - "le silence est d'or".You would not be the 1st one to do so!
Another possibility: "Abyss was gold". Or "(a) golden abyss".

Aren't abyss or silence more poetic than nothingness? Well this is just my subjective 2 cents. To you the last word for it's your creation ! ;-)