My Double-Dare Thursday Entry

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

This is still my favorite poem I've posted here.

“A Walk in the Mist”

Within a hidden room in a hidden castle
lies the sword that is meant for me.
But I can not find the castle, much less the room
among these mists that shroud the moor.

I await a wizard or genie, some being
to alight my path to the castle.
But I hear nothing, see nothing, and meet no one
as I wander through the fog.

And then, seeming to materialize from the
mist, a man stands before me, dressed in white,
and shimmering. He reaches out, and I take his
hand, only to realize his eyes are solid black,
and his hand is cold.

[Delta40]

Gee, for a brief moment I thought I was going to be rescued emotionally by a knight MM. Good one

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

Thanks, Delta. :)

[Calidore]

I remember that one. Great stuff. Thanks for reposting it.

[Jerrybaldy]

Hi M-M thanks for joining in. I can see why it is a favourite, I was inside that castle by the end of S1.

[Alexander III]

1) You have a goo sense of precision, I am not quite sure what to call it, but the verse is tight and clear and feels well-crafted. To steal a medieval man's line "Again I entered my smithy to work and forge something from the noble material of time past" - the work and forging is displayed well.

2) I however object to your material with which your forge. I do not critic the medieval/fantasy imagery in and of it's self, but I found the content of the poem to be uninspiring and devoid of what one might call beauty, in that there was no image or turn of phrase or such which tingled my aesthetic sense.

In short I admire the craftsmanship but find your choice of metal to be a dull one.

Also this is the first poem I have read from you, it is nice to see one of your poems after having debated and agreed with you for several months on various threads.

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

Thanks for the critique, Alex. It's appreciated. :nod:

And thanks, Jerry and Calidore.