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beate
09-20-2012, 01:25 PM
Should I do it, or should I not?
Hands trembling, the past I forgot
Something inside me says I should
But will I be able to stop?
Should I cry, or should I not?
Will anybody care if I fall?
Run, run but can't escape
Lost in a strange landscape
In a forest of staring trees
Automatic thought, written dreams
Trying to get me fall on my knees
Should I love, or should I not?
Will it change anything?
A blur in the background
Lost between shadows
Who feed on conflict, grow with strife
Live on arrogance, get high on pride
I live on, trying to smile
Try to last one more mile
Small, unsignificant, forgotten
Shrunk without a potion
Disappeared like a cat

Varenne Rodin
09-22-2012, 12:29 AM
I liked it. It was sad. There were bits of grammar I would change, but I think the emotion came across anyway. Good job.

Maximilianus
09-22-2012, 11:23 AM
It somehow reminds me of my past, though I was never interested in smiling. I was mostly interested in surviving what at the time felt an agony. Very nice work! :)